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Shadderd Again
My heart is broken
My heart unspoken
I am stronger this round
My eyes are not looking down
I wear a smile to cover my pain
Another scar gained
Love is a reality Ill never know
Gone crazy like the poet Poe
My futer is dark and gray
I hate feeling this way
When my heart gets shadderd
I feel like I dont matter
I know God is the light
It was hard to see him last night
I am single yet again
In love I never win
The only love that has stayed
The lord took him away
This is how my life goes
like blood on white snow.
Snow is cold and perfect
Blood is red like smeard lip stick.
I cry myself to sleep yet again
In this empty bed.
Some day Ill smile and be happy
Ill sleep with thought of yesterday.
"Good night" dark and empty sheets.
Its only you and me.
My heart unspoken
I am stronger this round
My eyes are not looking down
I wear a smile to cover my pain
Another scar gained
Love is a reality Ill never know
Gone crazy like the poet Poe
My futer is dark and gray
I hate feeling this way
When my heart gets shadderd
I feel like I dont matter
I know God is the light
It was hard to see him last night
I am single yet again
In love I never win
The only love that has stayed
The lord took him away
This is how my life goes
like blood on white snow.
Snow is cold and perfect
Blood is red like smeard lip stick.
I cry myself to sleep yet again
In this empty bed.
Some day Ill smile and be happy
Ill sleep with thought of yesterday.
"Good night" dark and empty sheets.
Its only you and me.
Published 23rd Apr 2013
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Anonymous
23rd Apr 2013 6:22pm
The rhyming is interesting but suddenly stops towards the end. I've counted a few spelling mistakes but I read you aren't a good speller, so maybe that could be your kick with your poetry.
As for the poem in it's entirety, I found it quite cliche, something written about often and the way you describe the things you've gone through I found no real edge or no real originality on why I would like to read it.
As for the poem in it's entirety, I found it quite cliche, something written about often and the way you describe the things you've gone through I found no real edge or no real originality on why I would like to read it.
23rd Apr 2013 11:58pm
Ill check the spelling but I write what Im going threw. Not what others want to hear.
