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With October Eyes
The fingertips of gravity gripped steadily, and pulled heavily at my sword, shield, and extremities. As I crawled backwards through a crack beneath the waterfall. My sword, she bounced and sparked as I drug her by my side in a desperate hurry to escape the snarls and gusts, dripping wet and plague like. Flooding this hide away entombed by the most crystalline cascades. What an amicable sanctuary, if not for the stench and death piled in the corners and littering the air. I hid and shook for days. Like the teeth of a December cadaver. Wondering if he had gone, or plots my demise. The most foul of dragons, with October eyes. Teeth that pierce diamonds, eyes that devour hearts, I must slay this god of a beast, it is my prophecy.
Published 21st Apr 2013
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The theme of the poem appears to be a weary warrior fleeing a powerful dragon. The poem alludes to an ultimate confrontation between the warrior and dragon. Free verse works nicely here, helping to convey the narrative sense of an ongoing mythical battle between good and evil. A formal rhyme scheme, such as pentameter or tetrameter could have worked too.
Nineteenth century British poets such as Tennyson or Browning would have imposed a formal rhyme scheme on this kind of poem. But modern poets often don't want their poetry constrained by formal rhyme.
This poem uses strong, emotionally laden words ("sword,... shield,...snarls,...demise,...slay,...)to paint a picture of the warrior and dragon. An enjoyable poem.
Nineteenth century British poets such as Tennyson or Browning would have imposed a formal rhyme scheme on this kind of poem. But modern poets often don't want their poetry constrained by formal rhyme.
This poem uses strong, emotionally laden words ("sword,... shield,...snarls,...demise,...slay,...)to paint a picture of the warrior and dragon. An enjoyable poem.
21st Apr 2013 8:21am
'"Modus Operandi""sword,shield and exttremeties"" its apocalyptic and brilliant!!:)Thank you loved it:)
October 28th and mostly remembered for general Ioannis Metaxas' strong reply of 'oxi' (no) to Mussolini's request : request to allow Italian troops to come into Greece at the beginning of WW II.
I'm Greek and when you I read ""October Eyes""this is what I rememebered me as a little girl marching in my uniform for the Greek OXI(NO) parade. I think I was 5.Thansk so much for sharing that, it bought back alot freedom marches as I rememeber. The last year in Greece before I arrived to Australia. Thanks(Its celebrated every year) Excellent Poet!!Its pronounced OHI (NO)
I'm Greek and when you I read ""October Eyes""this is what I rememebered me as a little girl marching in my uniform for the Greek OXI(NO) parade. I think I was 5.Thansk so much for sharing that, it bought back alot freedom marches as I rememeber. The last year in Greece before I arrived to Australia. Thanks(Its celebrated every year) Excellent Poet!!Its pronounced OHI (NO)
