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haiku 1
(this is my first published haiku so don't expect it to be great lol
but please comment and give me feedback. many thanks x)[/font]
tears fall from your eyes[/font][/font]
acidic to burn the flesh -
you are nothingness.
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but please comment and give me feedback. many thanks x)[/font]
tears fall from your eyes[/font][/font]
acidic to burn the flesh -
you are nothingness.
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Published 6th Oct 2010
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17th Nov 2010 8:36pm
18th Nov 2010 8:13am
thanksies, this was one of my first attempts so thanks for reading and commenting :)
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29th Nov 2010 3:47pm
The structure of your haiku is perfect. I excuse your grammar in the next line. Afterall, you have your poetic license.
30th Nov 2010 6:44pm
13th Aug 2012 5:40am
i liked it. i think haikus can be about what ever is in your head. i just found this site but i love it already.
