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I lay here alone in my room,
where it's always quiet.
Where the neighbors love to get
under my skin,
although they dont talk much.
My house is small
but cumfy.
It has walls and a roof
like yours.
It's always cold
or at least i think it is.
My house is surrounded with life
in the massive garden.
Six feet above me.
where it's always quiet.
Where the neighbors love to get
under my skin,
although they dont talk much.
My house is small
but cumfy.
It has walls and a roof
like yours.
It's always cold
or at least i think it is.
My house is surrounded with life
in the massive garden.
Six feet above me.
Published 4th Oct 2010
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4th Oct 2010 5:58am
It's the dark kind of pretty, almost an eery touch to it. :D I like your style so far, cant wait for more. I write pretty dark stuff like this, why dont you check it out? If you want to of course. :) Great job, Radiohead6, lol.
4th Oct 2010 2:49pm
reminds me of where I live...
I find the cold and the darkness helps me sort out my mind... It's too tangled up sometimes.
I love this.
I find the cold and the darkness helps me sort out my mind... It's too tangled up sometimes.
I love this.
4th Oct 2010 9:27pm
The way it speaks simply and directly at you us great...i love that word 'cumfy' i love the mis-spelling (don't know if it's intended or not) it makes the word so much more blanket like and comforting.
5th Oct 2010 6:12pm
woahhh nice dark touch to this poem with a slight eeriness! very nice indeed :)
keep writing
keep writing
5th Oct 2010 10:27pm
6th Oct 2010 6:55pm
i love this poem! it's filled with so much dark emotion which gives it that eerie feel :3
nice work x
nice work x
20th Mar 2011 1:38am
I had to read it twice to fully understand it, but the metaphorical imagery is amazing, it's short, but leaves a lasting impression, well done.
21st Oct 2011 6:15pm
Nice ending. I was getting cumfy to read and then you hit me with that and I sunk. Great work.
