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From A Man
Shes not a size
she's gorgeous.
Her lines are smooth
every curve makes
my heart race.
Feeling her flesh
on my hands as
I glide along her
round shapes.
Every word I
whisper into her
ear ignites her wick.
As I draw the fuel
from her fire she
gasps and holds
tightly to my head.
In between slurping
I remind her how
beautiful she is.
This makes her thrust
into my face giving
me a liquid mouthful.
Knowing that I can
stimulate this goddess
gives me all the pleasure
I need.
she's gorgeous.
Her lines are smooth
every curve makes
my heart race.
Feeling her flesh
on my hands as
I glide along her
round shapes.
Every word I
whisper into her
ear ignites her wick.
As I draw the fuel
from her fire she
gasps and holds
tightly to my head.
In between slurping
I remind her how
beautiful she is.
This makes her thrust
into my face giving
me a liquid mouthful.
Knowing that I can
stimulate this goddess
gives me all the pleasure
I need.
Published 8th Apr 2013
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YES!!! This is just brilliant, and my absolute favorite so far! Somehow you've managed to tap into the male mind PERFECTLY. Not all of them of course, in fact I'm convinced many if not most men don't think this way, but they should! Me however, this is 100% my take on sex, it's as if you reached into my head to write this! I love the first line, "She is not a size," it sets the tone of the poem with authority and just that line itself is genius! Just a quick aside: I have always preferred curvy women and abhorred the culture's obsession with size, so this line really resonates with me.
I'm admittedly too lazy to type out every line on my phone but I'd have something to say about every line you wrote, each one becomes my new favorite until...
"In between slurping...," this and everything after is just totally inspired, my favorite is this ending, such a poetic description of juicy erotic oral sex, sexual worship and extolling and, perhaps my favorite idea you tapped into, the idea that just getting this erotic goddess off is enough to get me off. So true! In reality, I usually bring her climax with my mouth, penetration being an ending afterthought many times, so this poem in general speaks to me so hard!
You're incredible, Tommie, this poem is a masterpiece in my eyes.
I'm admittedly too lazy to type out every line on my phone but I'd have something to say about every line you wrote, each one becomes my new favorite until...
"In between slurping...," this and everything after is just totally inspired, my favorite is this ending, such a poetic description of juicy erotic oral sex, sexual worship and extolling and, perhaps my favorite idea you tapped into, the idea that just getting this erotic goddess off is enough to get me off. So true! In reality, I usually bring her climax with my mouth, penetration being an ending afterthought many times, so this poem in general speaks to me so hard!
You're incredible, Tommie, this poem is a masterpiece in my eyes.
8th Apr 2013 8:43pm
Thank you...my whole face is a huge smile...thank you thank you... ;-)
I was going to add some more to this, throw some rock hard penetration into it but I feel I did that in another one I wrote, I agree though..after making sure the lady is "happy " there should be some penetration :)
I also think that a womans size REALLY shouldn't matter to a man, but I do UNDERSTAND that it sometimes does.EVERYONE needs love, and not just the sex kind...EVERYONE should be told how sexy or hot they are, that goes for women and men, that's just how I feel!!
THANK YOU again Deepest_Fantasy...:)
I was going to add some more to this, throw some rock hard penetration into it but I feel I did that in another one I wrote, I agree though..after making sure the lady is "happy " there should be some penetration :)
I also think that a womans size REALLY shouldn't matter to a man, but I do UNDERSTAND that it sometimes does.EVERYONE needs love, and not just the sex kind...EVERYONE should be told how sexy or hot they are, that goes for women and men, that's just how I feel!!
THANK YOU again Deepest_Fantasy...:)
8th Apr 2013 9:08pm
I agree, of course everyone has their preference, at the end of the day though everyone is looking for the same things: love and sex. And everyone should be blessed enough to be called beautiful and sexy by someone else!
9th Apr 2013 00:52am
8th Apr 2013 8:34pm
Can agree with comments that you tap into the male mind - a reader not knowing your sex might easily think a man wrote this.
8th Apr 2013 8:44pm
Anonymous
8th Apr 2013 9:03pm
Well done tommielynn...in character for sure...
Strider!
Strider!
9th Apr 2013 00:53am
