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Letter (Instrumental by Mors)
gazellemon
(Bradley J)
The Craft
Writing poetry to record has additional hoops that just a written poem doesn't have to overcome. Tone, pacing, breath control, mixing, matering, equipment setup, etc etc. I feel i have gotten better at these through practice and i am proud of this last one i made. It easy for me to get so caught up in the craft that my actual content suffers as i am more focused on the performance then what i am performing if that makes sense. Can anyone relate? As always, I'd love some feedback on this one from my homies here in the DU!
Also, i would encourage you all to pay anything you record here as that is why this group exists!
Also, i would encourage you all to pay anything you record here as that is why this group exists!
Can I get some honest feedback on this video I made in my room.
follow link below to the visuals:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qcrHTHH27J0
Lyrics:
I feel like a loser
I feel so stupid
no goals reached never reach conclusions
i'm like a fucking idiot
clueless but i'm living it
constantly giving in
bitching that i'm sick of it
why?
can't I ever finish shit I
always let opportunity pass me by
try as i might
still i lie in the night
with no sleep, zero sheep
in my eyes
Turn down the static
i'm a kratom addict
with a bad habit
the last cat to live lavish
and I rap fast, I rap slow
still get no
views, listens
who's dissing?
the list is only missing a few
shit add two
of the who's who
prove i lose
so i snooze
Yeah I said it,
i'm on reddit
straight feeling like a loser
on my computer and twitter
i figure my liver quivers
i've littered my brain
with killers of pain
delivered in vain
a loser the same
who's sober today
beginning to say,
i'll never win in this game
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qcrHTHH27J0
Lyrics:
I feel like a loser
I feel so stupid
no goals reached never reach conclusions
i'm like a fucking idiot
clueless but i'm living it
constantly giving in
bitching that i'm sick of it
why?
can't I ever finish shit I
always let opportunity pass me by
try as i might
still i lie in the night
with no sleep, zero sheep
in my eyes
Turn down the static
i'm a kratom addict
with a bad habit
the last cat to live lavish
and I rap fast, I rap slow
still get no
views, listens
who's dissing?
the list is only missing a few
shit add two
of the who's who
prove i lose
so i snooze
Yeah I said it,
i'm on reddit
straight feeling like a loser
on my computer and twitter
i figure my liver quivers
i've littered my brain
with killers of pain
delivered in vain
a loser the same
who's sober today
beginning to say,
i'll never win in this game
Na-Nu Na-Nu One & All!!
Greetings one and all for I am a passé anachronistic fogeyish antediluvian Marine Vet. I've been writing poetry, lyrics, quotes, and quips for nearly two scores (40 yrs). On occasion, in the past, I have gone to various diverse open mic nights at several different locations to recite my collective works but haven't quite got the responses that I did so desired from the audience. So I thought I would seek out some insightful assistance on how to be more vocal and presentable with my reciting poetry.