Poetry competition CLOSED 26th November 2013 3:07pm
WINNER
HadesRising
HadesRising
RUNNERS-UP:
PsychicApocalypse
and Intricate_B
Re-Write
RedBaron said:Wow what a great idea would love to contribute, If anyone want to take a wack at these
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/11094-recurring-nightmare/
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/129183-what-is-love/
I'll give 'What Is Love?' a shot
Have you ever heard the heart of a lion
Break in isolation, twilight
A mockery of pride’s roar
Something dying in the night
Robbed by mice of its eulogy
Dis-integration, the gears of affection stalled
Rust in miserable patterns cascades
Out of tense stagnation I must forsake
Like dry blood evicted from a ruptured heart
Drifting to cold ground as careless as my flame
I had thick skin
Until you made me prove it
I leave naivety with hatchet and worm
Bored to death
Callous men said you can be smothering
‘End quote’, with pins and needles
I’m too close to this
Trusty feet, once more I beseech you
To retrace the cruel road
On which we chased cursed streetcar, Desire
I’m too close to you
And sorrow will haunt my eyes until you leave them
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/11094-recurring-nightmare/
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/129183-what-is-love/
I'll give 'What Is Love?' a shot
Have you ever heard the heart of a lion
Break in isolation, twilight
A mockery of pride’s roar
Something dying in the night
Robbed by mice of its eulogy
Dis-integration, the gears of affection stalled
Rust in miserable patterns cascades
Out of tense stagnation I must forsake
Like dry blood evicted from a ruptured heart
Drifting to cold ground as careless as my flame
I had thick skin
Until you made me prove it
I leave naivety with hatchet and worm
Bored to death
Callous men said you can be smothering
‘End quote’, with pins and needles
I’m too close to this
Trusty feet, once more I beseech you
To retrace the cruel road
On which we chased cursed streetcar, Desire
I’m too close to you
And sorrow will haunt my eyes until you leave them
I've selected a short story in poem style that I find to be my favorite of all of the works I've written. I would be interested to see someone re-write them in their mind set you can choose one or all of them...
(1) http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/101380-darkness-to-light/
(2) http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/102171-light-to-darkness/
(3) http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/109662-light-to-darkness-ii/
(4) http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/110917-darkness-to-light-ii-the-end/
They were written in this order so whoever (If anyone) chooses to write them you don't get confused. Don't be discouraged, they aren't that long or hard to retain. I look forward to reading!
(1) http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/101380-darkness-to-light/
(2) http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/102171-light-to-darkness/
(3) http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/109662-light-to-darkness-ii/
(4) http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/110917-darkness-to-light-ii-the-end/
They were written in this order so whoever (If anyone) chooses to write them you don't get confused. Don't be discouraged, they aren't that long or hard to retain. I look forward to reading!
sorry about that. I'll fix it now.
ok this is my take on DarkerHalf's Let's Talk Evil. I hope it does the original justice. Enjoy....
LET'S TALK EVIL
MY PUNISHMENT
For past crimes
I can't hide.
This blood on my hands
Cannot be washed
Away...
In the chair
So unfair.
A judge of a man
Has weighed my sins
I'm damned...
An electric jolt
Is like fire in my veins.
(Seeing my sins unfold.)
The muscles twitch
And death comes creeping.
(Into a life of pain untold.)
There he stands
A cloven man,
A heart black as sin
My punishment
Soon begins...
First comes screams
Between the scenes
Engineered torment
Of fetish pain
In crimson tint...
An infernal burn
Is like ice shards in my veins.
(Seeing my sins unfold.)
The muscles twitch
And death comes creeping.
(Into a life of pain untold.)
My cries fall
He hears all,
But stirs only grins.
Lord of the flies
And of men.
Crucify!
Inverted lies.
Upon the cross in Hell
Forever I fight
Against
Crucifixion nails.
LET'S TALK EVIL
MY PUNISHMENT
For past crimes
I can't hide.
This blood on my hands
Cannot be washed
Away...
In the chair
So unfair.
A judge of a man
Has weighed my sins
I'm damned...
An electric jolt
Is like fire in my veins.
(Seeing my sins unfold.)
The muscles twitch
And death comes creeping.
(Into a life of pain untold.)
There he stands
A cloven man,
A heart black as sin
My punishment
Soon begins...
First comes screams
Between the scenes
Engineered torment
Of fetish pain
In crimson tint...
An infernal burn
Is like ice shards in my veins.
(Seeing my sins unfold.)
The muscles twitch
And death comes creeping.
(Into a life of pain untold.)
My cries fall
He hears all,
But stirs only grins.
Lord of the flies
And of men.
Crucify!
Inverted lies.
Upon the cross in Hell
Forever I fight
Against
Crucifixion nails.
this is another of Darker's poems that I've rewritten. Go easy please. This is
I PERISH
I wonder if she hears
This cone of silence?
This black emptiness
That seems to consume
Everything.
Without her my life is void
Since I tossed her away, a broken toy.
I wade lonely,
In this sea of emptiness.
The winds of swept away all
Which have made me alive.
I turn in this maelstrom
Of vast emptiness.
I just keep thinking
Of those final words
They lash my being
And cut like a sword.
I can taste your tears from here
And hear your choking sobs.
That's when I break like a wave
On those jagged rocks.
I still feel that one last kiss
You left me with a scar.
I sit sweating but shivering
Quivering
From a love lost to tragedy.
Without her my life is void
Since I tossed her away, a broken toy.
I wade lonely,
In this sea of emptiness.
The winds of swept away all
Which have made me alive.
I turn in this maelstrom
Of vast emptiness.
I PERISH
I wonder if she hears
This cone of silence?
This black emptiness
That seems to consume
Everything.
Without her my life is void
Since I tossed her away, a broken toy.
I wade lonely,
In this sea of emptiness.
The winds of swept away all
Which have made me alive.
I turn in this maelstrom
Of vast emptiness.
I just keep thinking
Of those final words
They lash my being
And cut like a sword.
I can taste your tears from here
And hear your choking sobs.
That's when I break like a wave
On those jagged rocks.
I still feel that one last kiss
You left me with a scar.
I sit sweating but shivering
Quivering
From a love lost to tragedy.
Without her my life is void
Since I tossed her away, a broken toy.
I wade lonely,
In this sea of emptiness.
The winds of swept away all
Which have made me alive.
I turn in this maelstrom
Of vast emptiness.
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/110432-better-to-burn-out/
Letting Go
http://media.tumblr.com/tumblr_m5tonaT3s81rr0p82.jpg
The skin of our palms,
no longer tingle.
The touch no longer sends
that electric sizzle.
A proof to us,
that love does fade
It has become nothing but,
empty sex.
It's just... not...
the same.
We have tied each other,
with suffocating chains.
Innocently, we thought,
this affection, would
have lasted for years.
Naive.
Though I've tried by best to
rekindle that flame.
No matter what I do,
I know that inner warmth,
will never be the same.
So, just as the winds of
love,
pushed us together at the
mountain edge,
I'm letting you go myself.
I break your connection to
me.
You're still young, be free.
I'm happy, just to be able
to see,
you,
just,
be.
