Triolets

[font=Verdana]Ah, in that case Anando you're fine. Thanks for enlightening me Ray:)

Thank you Ray for sharing your views with Jack in the light of my work.
Jack I must say that I agree with both of you over here because in many accents thwart is not rhyming with heart. But I think in my dialect it does.
BTW I have used thwart not in a forced way to match heart without any sense but I think that both of you can understand that it was required in the context.
In any case I will honor your decision Jack.

*In sickness and death*

I found your names on randomness  
That made them damsels choose my chest.
Pores of a duplex blossomed base
I found your names on randomness  
That oozed its white of blind distress
On naked Cyprus skin and death.
I found your names on randomness  
That made them damsels choose my chest.

Hi Jack
I'm new here so please forgive me if I make any errors-I'm learning the ropes.Here's my entry:

The subtle beauty of the violet,
poets mention her by name.
Painted sweetly in a triolet,
the subtle beauty of the violet,
worn by nature like an amulet,
burning with a purple flame.
The subtle beauty of the violet,
poets mention her by name.

I hope it is to your liking.

A Silent Thunder  


Horses run a silent thunder
scarlet skies of solar descent .
Ruby coloured blood fills over .
Horses run a silent thunder
I watch in concern to wonder .
Is the end nigh with what is sent .
Horses run a silent thunder
scarlet skies of solar descent .

[font=Verdana]Your triolet is perfect, Bonang. You do marvellously for one just learning the ropes.
Paul, your triolet doesn't follow the required A B A A A B A B rhyme scheme, though you've made a good try. A bit of polishing might bring it up to scratch.

ok jack erm I modded it ok so I hope I actually got it right this time :)

[font=Verdana]Yep, that looks about right.

Hi Jack
Thank you for your kind comment on my triolet.I've got 2 more on my page-maybe you can look through them sometime.I've written about 40 since I discovered the form 3 weeks ago!Great competition by the way-thanks for hosting!!!

rayheinrich said:

             < Martha & George >
     
       cat this cat that you hit i spat
       i hit you slit my paw we're cats      
       you bit i bat me shit you shat
       cat this cat that you hit i spat      
       he cat she kit he kit she cat
       we this we that we spits we spats      
       cat this cat that you hit i spat
       i hit you slit my paw we're cats
     
                    - - -



Nice try, but this one doesn't follow the correct rhyme scheme, Ray.

    "Nice try, but this one doesn't follow the correct rhyme scheme, Ray."
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 You're wrong, it does; look again:

 A B A A A B A B ->

            < Martha & George >
   
      cat this cat that you hit i spat  A  
      i hit you slit my paw we're cats  B      
      you bit i bat me shit you shat    A
      cat this cat that you hit i spat  A    
      he cat she kit he kit she cat     A
      we this we that we spits we spats B      
      cat this cat that you hit i spat  A
      i hit you slit my paw we're cats  B
   
                   - - -
 A words: spat, shat, cat  -- all rhyme according to below* rhyming dics.
 B words: cats, spats      -- all rhyme according to below* rhyming dics.

 None of the A words rhyme with any of the B words according to below* rhyming dics.

 Note that all of the lines are quite perfect (actually too perfect, but this has
 been done intentionally for effect) iambic tetrameter.

 Also, just for fun, I'd like to note that this is a poem about the two main
 characters (Martha & George) in Edward Albee's play "Who's Afraid of Virginia Woolf?"
 and, by extension, the two main characters in Mike Nichols' movie "Who's Afraid of
 Virginia Woolf?": Elizabeth Taylor (as Martha) and Richard Burton (as George).

 Of course, if anyone would like to interpret the metaphorical cats as literal cats:
 this is totally acceptable to me (as well as completely not in any way whatsoever
 under my control as obviously you could choose to interpret them as ice cream cones
 if you should so choose. See my poem: < strawberry milkshake > at:
 http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/11003/
 for possible explanations.

 *Rhyming Dictionaries:
 WriteExpress Online Rhyming Dictionary:http://www.writeexpress.com/online2.html
 RhymeZone - Shakespeare - rhyming dictionary and thesaurus:http://www.rhymezone.com/
 RhymeBrain - Rhyme any word, even made up ones:http://rhymebrain.com/
 Best Rhyming Dictionary - WikiRhymer:http://www.wikirhymer.com/
 
 And BTW, the best(IMHO) thesaurus:
 Thesaurus and Dictionary:http://thesaurus.reference.com/

 Please note I have NOT posted my poetry site at the end as the WebMiz has
 asked us not to. While I will obey, I think this is misguided because it
 punishes regular, law-abiding members and has no effect whatsoever on spammers,
 but, who I am to complain? Oh, yes, I'm Ray Heinrich and my email address is:
 raychoochoo@wordbiscuit.com and I fear no spammers, well, ok, almost no as there
 was this one a few years back who sent porno pictures to all my relatives, which,
 wouldn't have been so bad, except, I found out my mom just loved them, but, except
 for that one, lone, spammer, I fear no spammers. But, and the Webmiz approves of this,
 the URL to my non-commercial, non-profit, visited at least 2 times a week
 [when you subtract the search engines] personal poetry website can be found
 in my profile located here:http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poets/rayheinrich/

me in a drainage ditch
eyes toward a cloud
see what rain it will pitch
me in a drainage ditch
the sun today is rich
it does not speak loud
me in a drainage ditch
eyes toward a cloud

Not sure if erotic is allowed in these competitions.  Here goes...  This is my first Triolet

Cheating Decisions

Entombed inside her almost there
I must withdraw to take my shot
I must unload into her hair
Entombed inside her almost there
She closes her eyes to prepare
Finishing inside I cannot
Entombed inside her almost there
I must withdraw to take my shot