Poems About Loneliness Seeking Honest Critique
#loneliness
Poems about loneliness seeking honest critique. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
Straight Lines Never Followed
Straight lines are sometimes difficult to walk...Near impossible to follow...Especially for the addict. The one's who are angry...The one's who are misunderstood...The one's who are sad...The one's who are alone & empty. ..The one's nobody could love. Prisoner to a label of family structure in the making...Prisoner of self-image, trouble & bad news. Negative pages that crowd books I flipped through...Books that should have been burned, like a witch at the stake falsely accused. Peers thought I was inscrutable in meaning. Crazy & wild in demeanour and a loser deal. A label that can...
#loneliness
#regret
#rejection #sadness
#rejection #sadness
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Walls
I wonder what’s happening
Outside
Where I can’t go
No
The light hurts
It ventures too deep
Well below
Burrowing into the soul
Eyes of the enemy betray them
For I sense their true intent
That I am surplus to requirements
About to find myself on the wrong side of mercy
So I stay inside
Behind the blinds
Sheltering from the glare
Away from my humiliation
Fear holds firm
I try to speak
Above screaming silence
Into the...
Outside
Where I can’t go
No
The light hurts
It ventures too deep
Well below
Burrowing into the soul
Eyes of the enemy betray them
For I sense their true intent
That I am surplus to requirements
About to find myself on the wrong side of mercy
So I stay inside
Behind the blinds
Sheltering from the glare
Away from my humiliation
Fear holds firm
I try to speak
Above screaming silence
Into the...
#fear
#loneliness
#MentalHealth
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Number One
There is only one number
The number one
All other digits are cluttered
I have too much confusion in my life
In order to annihilate my confusion, my time wasting activities,
I must get to one after the smoke clears
She will be my only weakness
Like many instances, things are not always what they seem
Many weaknesses are blessings in disguise, clouds with silver linings
She is my weakness
She is my blessing
The number one
All other digits are cluttered
I have too much confusion in my life
In order to annihilate my confusion, my time wasting activities,
I must get to one after the smoke clears
She will be my only weakness
Like many instances, things are not always what they seem
Many weaknesses are blessings in disguise, clouds with silver linings
She is my weakness
She is my blessing
#confusion
#identity
#loneliness
#myself
#weakness
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Under Par
I try too hard
I'm in too deep
I'm under par
and I can't sleep.
I comprehend
that I don't know
I overspend
on what I can't own
I don't pretend
I'm not a phony show
and all that I mend
was never really broke
each breath
makes me choke
I'm right next to below
my best test was a draw.
There's nothing to bequeath
when there's nothing you own
just the empty seat
with no queen, from a throne
when all I do so need
frustratingly is fools golds
I'm sure this means...
I'm in too deep
I'm under par
and I can't sleep.
I comprehend
that I don't know
I overspend
on what I can't own
I don't pretend
I'm not a phony show
and all that I mend
was never really broke
each breath
makes me choke
I'm right next to below
my best test was a draw.
There's nothing to bequeath
when there's nothing you own
just the empty seat
with no queen, from a throne
when all I do so need
frustratingly is fools golds
I'm sure this means...
#loneliness
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Antisocial
I like to be around you for about 24 to 48 hours and then I get sick of you
I don't like it when you tell me that you like me and want to spend more time with me
I keep my distance
On a certain level, you make me sick
Even your smell repels me
You see how I am on the third day
I don't want to know anything about your life
I like the girls the others don't touch
The ones that get called stupid
They're not as stupid as you might think
They know me
They know I'm a loner
They know why I come around
They know I'm only good for one...
I don't like it when you tell me that you like me and want to spend more time with me
I keep my distance
On a certain level, you make me sick
Even your smell repels me
You see how I am on the third day
I don't want to know anything about your life
I like the girls the others don't touch
The ones that get called stupid
They're not as stupid as you might think
They know me
They know I'm a loner
They know why I come around
They know I'm only good for one...
#apathy
#fiction
#loneliness
#sex
#ShortStory
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Occasion
Wind like a lover’s words
Ripple across arid fields
Vibrating their vibe
Pulsating, swirling
Kicking up dust
Here in the midst
Stands you
Embracing every detail
Transfixed
Ready to give yourself
To anyone that will have you
Life for love
Reasoning submitted
Your damaged eyes
Lost in the sun…
Unable to look away
Yearning
Blistered lips plead
(for….)
Just a kiss
An occasional touch
To connect
At any cost
Yet, fleetingly…
Moments depart
Scorched earth...
Ripple across arid fields
Vibrating their vibe
Pulsating, swirling
Kicking up dust
Here in the midst
Stands you
Embracing every detail
Transfixed
Ready to give yourself
To anyone that will have you
Life for love
Reasoning submitted
Your damaged eyes
Lost in the sun…
Unable to look away
Yearning
Blistered lips plead
(for….)
Just a kiss
An occasional touch
To connect
At any cost
Yet, fleetingly…
Moments depart
Scorched earth...
#loneliness
#relationships
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Stuck
Look at you all smiling and glowing
By not guessing but knowing
Or following whatever seems to lead you
To whatever you desire
I am tired, just not wired
The way you are is my dream come true
Just stuck, stasis, both feet forever on the ground
Stuck, my place is still here, never up or down
Growing and changing, but never really moving
I feel like my fate is to forever be pushing
Stuck, while they float around
Stuck, alone on the ground
By not guessing but knowing
Or following whatever seems to lead you
To whatever you desire
I am tired, just not wired
The way you are is my dream come true
Just stuck, stasis, both feet forever on the ground
Stuck, my place is still here, never up or down
Growing and changing, but never really moving
I feel like my fate is to forever be pushing
Stuck, while they float around
Stuck, alone on the ground
#emptiness
#fear
#frustration
#jealousy
#loneliness
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Embrace
how do I set my thoughts on fire
and watch them dance on the sky
how do I unfeel a dreadful desire
of ever wanting to die
die by choking, die by bleeding
die as I am a miserable mistake
never enough - always weeping
over some trite heartache
ache is my new best friend
bound together now and hereafter
till all my hopes meet an end
and my insanity bursts in laughter
laughter's all behind my back
how could I be so naive
again to fall to the same trap
yet I still believe - I believe
I...
and watch them dance on the sky
how do I unfeel a dreadful desire
of ever wanting to die
die by choking, die by bleeding
die as I am a miserable mistake
never enough - always weeping
over some trite heartache
ache is my new best friend
bound together now and hereafter
till all my hopes meet an end
and my insanity bursts in laughter
laughter's all behind my back
how could I be so naive
again to fall to the same trap
yet I still believe - I believe
I...
#dark
#fear
#heartbroken
#loneliness
#sadness
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Relapse
I sit in this darkness, and all I do is think.
Im not doing drugs
There's nothing to drink.
I created this mess.
I made my own bed.
Now I sit here alone with the thoughts in my head.
Will I ever learn?
No it doesn't seem so...
Will I ever feel better.
I really don't know. ..
Only I can change it..
But I don't want to alone .
I just want someone here w me
It sucks on my own.
And I know I can do it ,
I've done it before ..
But this time seems different.
And im not really sure .
I seem...
Im not doing drugs
There's nothing to drink.
I created this mess.
I made my own bed.
Now I sit here alone with the thoughts in my head.
Will I ever learn?
No it doesn't seem so...
Will I ever feel better.
I really don't know. ..
Only I can change it..
But I don't want to alone .
I just want someone here w me
It sucks on my own.
And I know I can do it ,
I've done it before ..
But this time seems different.
And im not really sure .
I seem...
#disappointment
#emptiness
#loneliness
#regret
#sadness
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Buddhist monk
In silent nights,
the Buddhist monk leans over
the ancient sutras,
between the yellowed pages,
he seeks answers
for the desires of his heart.
The moon, serene and silver,
lights up the temple
while he meditates
his thoughts wander
in search of understanding.
He recalls the words of the Buddha
that he taught about suffering
and detachment being like love,
regardless of its shape,
It can be a blessing or a trap.
The monk contemplates the duality of life:
desire and renunciation.
And how love, like a...
the Buddhist monk leans over
the ancient sutras,
between the yellowed pages,
he seeks answers
for the desires of his heart.
The moon, serene and silver,
lights up the temple
while he meditates
his thoughts wander
in search of understanding.
He recalls the words of the Buddha
that he taught about suffering
and detachment being like love,
regardless of its shape,
It can be a blessing or a trap.
The monk contemplates the duality of life:
desire and renunciation.
And how love, like a...
#anxiety
#Buddhist
#loneliness
#love
#sex
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Omega Man
Get out of bed
Feeling undead
Trapped in the void
Inside my head
Colours turned grey
Drifting away
Not sure I'll make
Another day
Everyone's gone
Now I'm just one
Forgot the last time
I had some fun
Wish I was real
Could love and could feel
Instead I've got scars
And wounds that don't heal
Hope's running low
Wish I could go
Far from this place
To where, I don't know
No sun, just rain
Drenched in the pain
Tomorrow I start
It all again
Feeling undead
Trapped in the void
Inside my head
Colours turned grey
Drifting away
Not sure I'll make
Another day
Everyone's gone
Now I'm just one
Forgot the last time
I had some fun
Wish I was real
Could love and could feel
Instead I've got scars
And wounds that don't heal
Hope's running low
Wish I could go
Far from this place
To where, I don't know
No sun, just rain
Drenched in the pain
Tomorrow I start
It all again
#apocalypse
#fear
#horror
#hurt
#loneliness
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Send me back
Woke up in the ER
Not sure where I am.
What happened.
I was happier before I woke.
My wife kissed me.
My daughters and sons hugged me.
All I remember was back Hurt
My chest felt really tight
Neck stiff
I woke up in a field of yellow roses with my family
Then I woke up in a hospital.
Doc why send me back
Not sure where I am.
What happened.
I was happier before I woke.
My wife kissed me.
My daughters and sons hugged me.
All I remember was back Hurt
My chest felt really tight
Neck stiff
I woke up in a field of yellow roses with my family
Then I woke up in a hospital.
Doc why send me back
#family
#heartbroken
#loneliness
#love
#memories
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DU Poetry : Poems About Loneliness Seeking Honest Critique