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(yes, another love poem) selenophobia remedied
I left under
the swollen blind eye of night
never knew, never could,
that I'd be stolen from your morning
this is my redemption and
my only salvation
think of me
as the moon is chewed
day after day, week after week
then spat out new every month
as the hunted run from memories
I think of you
as your tears roll slow
crystalising in the cold sand dunes
that are ghosts of a sea that's lost
but the moon pulls at them anyway
forget the sun's solace
accept your loss as I've embraced mine
concede to the night
and know
that the moon graces both our skies
and know
as I look to the swollen blind moon
I think of you too
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Re: (yes, another love poem) selenophobia remedied
26th Jul 2012 12:25pm
I found these lines especially touching:
" ... forget the sun's solace
accept your loss as I've embraced mine
concede to the night
and know
that the moon graces both our skies ..."
A truly sad, gentle piece ... You converted me to the love poem - for the moment, at least ;-)
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re: Re: (yes, another love poem) selenophobia remedied
26th Jul 2012 12:45pm
I suppose a moment is more than enough for love poems. :)
Thanks for your time, Kaatho.
Thanks for your time, Kaatho.
Re: (yes, another love poem) selenophobia remedied
26th Jul 2012 1:30pm
This is such an awing poem. You are truly the kind of writer I aspire to be. I love how you translated your ideas to produce this beautifully haunting, rare piece. If you have any tips for a beginner, please do share.
Peace and love
Peace and love
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re: Re: (yes, another love poem) selenophobia remedied
26th Jul 2012 1:56pm
If you show me a poem I'll see what I can do, but I'm also a beginner.
Thanks for your kind words and time.
Thanks for your kind words and time.
Re: (yes, another love poem) selenophobia remedied
26th Jul 2012 3:53pm
A very touching piece Mr.A, profoundly melancholic and finite. Thank you for sharing it.
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re: Re: (yes, another love poem) selenophobia remedied
26th Jul 2012 6:03pm
Re: (yes, another love poem) selenophobia remedied
26th Jul 2012 7:11pm
i'don' unastan
lovpooms
lovesongs
anymo...donthink eyever did nor will/ no need to eye suppose/ ikeeps singing'em...most thru saxophonic apparatus as is my ob
cession....my lovesongpooms is best witout humanword........
this is thee best love poom i've readed all day, infinitely finite subtlations knot'witstanding..tho upstanding wee see
thnx, Alp
lovpooms
lovesongs
anymo...donthink eyever did nor will/ no need to eye suppose/ ikeeps singing'em...most thru saxophonic apparatus as is my ob
cession....my lovesongpooms is best witout humanword........
this is thee best love poom i've readed all day, infinitely finite subtlations knot'witstanding..tho upstanding wee see
thnx, Alp
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re: Re: (yes, another love poem) selenophobia remedied
27th Jul 2012 8:05am
A love poem to me is just a flirt with words, most the time.
So you're a cat with a sax? I play strings myself, not.so much lately though. Writing has consumed me.
Thanks, Daniel.
So you're a cat with a sax? I play strings myself, not.so much lately though. Writing has consumed me.
Thanks, Daniel.
re: re: Re: (yes, another love poem) selenophobia remedied
28th Jul 2012 3:59pm
yes,
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find
plenty perf ormances on Farcebook,YooToob, etc
under the
trulyfalse
i'dentity
of
"Dan Kozak"
ycan
find
plenty perf ormances on Farcebook,YooToob, etc
under the
trulyfalse
i'dentity
of
"Dan Kozak"
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Re: (yes, another love poem) selenophobia remedied
Anonymous
26th Jul 2012 10:51pm
This one really touched me. It's achingly beautiful. Almost bought a tear to my eye.
But of course I'll never admit that. Ahem.
But of course I'll never admit that. Ahem.
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re: Re: (yes, another love poem) selenophobia remedied
27th Jul 2012 8:07am
I wanted to post this in some competition and not to my profile, but there was nowhere for it.
Your almost tear has some justification, you can admit you're romantic.
Thank you, Missy.
Your almost tear has some justification, you can admit you're romantic.
Thank you, Missy.
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Re: (yes, another love poem) selenophobia remedied
Anonymous
14th Aug 2012 6:29am
This one pulled at the heart strings...had to have it for myself...I mean my list ;)
very well done
I am a romantic, happy or sad
*Tear*
very well done
I am a romantic, happy or sad
*Tear*
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