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The Hook
Skating 'cross bronze teeth - sentinels stand guard over zippered troves
my fingers disband the brigade
down the fly
they frisk
they pry
You are firm before I fetch you
pulsing beneath the weight of waiting
a slick tip and Hanes sticky - twitching forward
murmuring "Mik..."
I trace inseams
minutes shudder
stiffness strains
heat trembles
a fever forms under my palm
There's a throbbing in your eyes...
so I kiss
your jeans again...
Published 30th Sep 2018
Author's Note
When the *before* is almost better than the *during* ;)
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30th Sep 2018 6:08am
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30th Sep 2018 2:41pm
"When the *before* is almost better than the *during* ;)"
That usually is the case in great erotic poetry such as this.
That usually is the case in great erotic poetry such as this.
1st Oct 2018 1:23am
I tend to agree. It's so engaging when things trail off, I wrote this in part by being inspired by other pieces with similar tones in the past.
30th Sep 2018 4:26pm
The title, so temping …….
and the bait so tasty'...….
I swallowed the words "line & sinker",
to be left thrashing about,
but not as a fish out of water.
You have the Gift, dear poetess,
so, as the bait of poetry once more
fills your bucket, cast, cast again,
for the waters are gluttonous.
and the bait so tasty'...….
I swallowed the words "line & sinker",
to be left thrashing about,
but not as a fish out of water.
You have the Gift, dear poetess,
so, as the bait of poetry once more
fills your bucket, cast, cast again,
for the waters are gluttonous.
1st Oct 2018 1:24am
Thank you so very much! The sentiment is quite reciprocal. I look up to you quite a bit!
1st Oct 2018 2:08am
very nice and seductive. me being a Haynes man myself made this all the better.it makes me think about ...well the obvious juicy bombshell you just LAID on us and and being at Walmart and loudly talking "do you prefer a penis pocket or penis buttons ?" in the under ware isle lol.
well penned.
well penned.
1st Oct 2018 2:24am
Dude...so happy you enjoyed! It's a rare thing for me to write any erotica, but I like to make I count :)
Weirder things have happened in Walmart...I'm sure...
Weirder things have happened in Walmart...I'm sure...
2nd Oct 2018 4:36pm
3rd Oct 2018 1:26am
AtoMik.. brilliant and sexy.. nicely done.. you got skills.. love and respect..
Dave
Dave
