Is she pretty? ... Prettier than me?

Watch the video:

https://m.youtube.com/watch?v=Nu9d7-zH9v8

Your poem (or prose) can use the video as a springboard
or be reflective of a conversation every couple in the world has had ...

Old or new
Collaborations, yes
No previous competition winners
Two weeks

Have fun!

i'll be coming back to this one. interesting video.

      beautiful (with codicil)


nothing is so beautiful that it isn’t flawed.

wabi-sabi, the Japanese call it. a passion for the austere:
in hagi, ikebana, shibui artifacts. transcendental beauty
derived from the un-beautiful.

she has been touched by men. the marks are still there.
she has a certain reputation: ‘bad girl,’ they have called her.

who is so pure that they can parade in the city, naked &
unashamed? is there one among us who can cast
the first stone?

she’s been abused & beaten; bruises so lucid that they
glow in the dark. broken, but not subjugated, so that,
as Hemingway decreed, she became stronger in the
broken places.

if I attempt to corner her, she runs, too quickly for me to
catch. I can offer her a harbor, a port: grace from her storms.
but she won’t come.  because there is no beauty here.

from the distance, I watch her, desperate & whorish
in the tempest. I can feel her, almost,
in my arms.   in my heart…


nothing is so beautiful that it isn’t flawed.
and that is the ideal beauty.

Sass Me Again, I Dare Ya

is she purdier than me?
no biscuit, she's a catta pillar
you're a butta fly
and I'm a cowboy
who is mortified
that you would
ask such an onerous question
you have no wurries My Dear
I find her queer
she leaves a sour taste
in my face
you taste like beer
allow me to toast
to your marvel and divinity
you are truly the most beautiful melody
my eyes did hear
You is Shakespeare
she is spades
you the queen
she's the maid
I would never trade you for her
it'll be like trading
gold for silver
she cannot come betwixt us
when the Lord made love
he picked us
so, is she purdier than you?
I'll beat your ass
if you keep giving me sass
and after you black and blue
YUP! she IS purdier than you
now shut up and eat your steak

John and Bo ... Thank you both for such wonderful reads!

You see her in the magazine airbrushed perfect Vazquez.Teeth as white as the snow, she smiles as though she knows. Perfection in every way or so we are made to believe. Sun kissed skin, shiny hair not a single strand out of place. Flawlessly makeup, perfect nails with polished toes, posed picture perfect for all of those...

Now look at me what do you see, grey hair that is all over the place, wrinkled eyes from lack of sleep, a smile that hides the fear inside that one day you will want her more then me.

These stretch marks from the children I carried,now cover this once perfect body. These size twelve hips that once were a zero, you hold onto them like some kind of hero.
You gaze into my eyes with a look of passion, smile and with much conviction you say,

Your more beautiful then the girl I first met, your more beautiful than a super model pet, your more beautiful then all the stars above your more beautiful because you are my love.

when you say no other competition winners, you mean the poem can't be a previous winner or the poet can't be a previous winner?

TheGoddessMinerva said:when you say no other competition winners, you mean the poem can't be a previous winner or the poet can't be a previous winner?

The poem can't have won ... Looking forward to your take on this.

prettier than you?

“is she prettier than me?”

love, i don’t know the answer to that question.
one question leads to many:

i don’t know how she takes her coffee
or if she has a favorite pen.
i don’t know how she looks
in the gloaming
with lightning bugs
flickering all around.

does she choose her words with care?
does she bite the ends of pencils
when a phrase isn’t turning
just right?

would her left fingertips drag roughly across my skin,
calloused from careful guitar practice?
does her voice start to sound perfectly irresistible
after her favorite bourbon has swirled on her tongue?
does she sing straight to me,
no matter the size of the crowd?

love, i don’t know how she sleeps.
would she cocoon herself to me
and run her fingers through the moonlight?
would her eyes soften, and close, when my fingers
tug gently on her hair?

i don’t want to answer those questions.

Is she pretty? Prettier than me?

Time is a reminder of all that could be
Looking at this reflection, it's more than I can say
My thoughts drift away
I wonder is she pretty...prettier than me?
 
I gave her life, but gave her away
It's just what had to be
I heard the nurses say
Is she pretty? Prettier than me?
 
Now that your grown
A little girl you have of your own
I hope one day you'll see
You're pretty, prettier than me...

Siskel and Ebert Weigh In On “The Restaurant Couple”
(A Play in One Act)


Emcee:  Welcome to another edition of “Siskel and Ebert” where it’s all movies, all the time.  Please give a big round of applause to our hosts, Gene Siskel and Roger Ebert!

Canned applause and cheering grace the air, as the camera pans to Gene and Roger onstage, in their discussion chairs.

Gene Siskel:  Roger, nice to see you back here with me.

Roger Ebert:  Gene, likewise—great to be here and reviewing movies with you, as always.

Gene Siskel:  Well then, let’s get started, shall we?

Roger Ebert: Absolutely, Gene, and our first film tonight is “The Restaurant Couple”, a short Indie production from YouTube.  What did you think about this, Gene?

Gene Siskel: Well, Roger, I think it was a well put together introspective piece about the human emotions that come about when insecurities arise in relationships.  The actors portrayed a couple spiraling into what could have been an unavoidable argument, had they communicated better at the start of their relationship.

Roger Ebert: I agree, Gene, and I’d like to add in that it was almost comical in a sad way, to watch the woman have a meltdown over assumptions she made about her boyfriend, stemming from her own insecurities in herself, and probably a bit of PMS, as well.

Gene Siskel:  Spot on, Roger!  Yes, this woman is definitely hormonal, with all the accusations flying about her boyfriend sneaking a peek at another woman in the restaurant, who by now, is definitely more attractive than the Estrogen Queen in question, just for the simple fact that she (the other woman) isn’t flinging this guy’s emotions around like a ragdoll.

Roger Chuckles

Roger Ebert:  Ah, we’ve all been there, Gene

Gene Siskel:  Indeed we have, Roger

Roger Ebert: Well, overall, I’d say a “thumbs up” to the film, but a “thumbs down” to Her Majesty’s Hormones.

Gene Siskel: I have to agree with you on this one, Roger

Roger Ebert:  And there you have it, folks—two thumbs up for “The Restaurant Couple” and two thumbs down for the emotional wreck.  And I have to say to that poor guy she’s dating—dude, you really have to ditch that bitch…..

She asked, "Is she pretty - prettier than me?"
I said, "No, I've not seen her in nudity."

I absolutely love the interpretations I'm seeing here! ... You all are awesome!

http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/images/uploads/poemimages/210430.jpg



Maybe.


I pick at my mental scabs alone,
she gets to licks his scars.

Superficial politics  
the laws of attraction,
I've lived em all.

Phoenix please
help me to see,
what's in my memories
and,  
will never be...



Does she know?!
It's the beginning  
of the end?!

Regardless,
she will always be prettier,
she is,  
the woman in you....  

Confidence with a twist of calm
never nervous
to the bitter end.


Two can play,  
          one can dance  
a shadows glance,
the lonely dance...

MadameLavender said:Siskel and Ebert Weigh In On “The Restaurant Couple”
(A Play in One Act)


Emcee:  Welcome to another edition of “Siskel and Ebert” where it’s all movies, all the time.  Please give a big round of applause to our hosts, Gene Siskel and Roger Ebert!

Canned applause and cheering grace the air, as the camera pans to Gene and Roger onstage, in their discussion chairs.

Gene Siskel:  Roger, nice to see you back here with me.

Roger Ebert:  Gene, likewise—great to be here and reviewing movies with you, as always.

Gene Siskel:  Well then, let’s get started, shall we?

Roger Ebert: Absolutely, Gene, and our first film tonight is “The Restaurant Couple”, a short Indie production from YouTube.  What did you think about this, Gene?

Gene Siskel: Well, Roger, I think it was a well put together introspective piece about the human emotions that come about when insecurities arise in relationships.  The actors portrayed a couple spiraling into what could have been an unavoidable argument, had they communicated better at the start of their relationship.

Roger Ebert: I agree, Gene, and I’d like to add in that it was almost comical in a sad way, to watch the woman have a meltdown over assumptions she made about her boyfriend, stemming from her own insecurities in herself, and probably a bit of PMS, as well.

Gene Siskel:  Spot on, Roger!  Yes, this woman is definitely hormonal, with all the accusations flying about her boyfriend sneaking a peek at another woman in the restaurant, who by now, is definitely more attractive than the Estrogen Queen in question, just for the simple fact that she (the other woman) isn’t flinging this guy’s emotions around like a ragdoll.

Roger Chuckles

Roger Ebert:  Ah, we’ve all been there, Gene

Gene Siskel:  Indeed we have, Roger

Roger Ebert: Well, overall, I’d say a “thumbs up” to the film, but a “thumbs down” to Her Majesty’s Hormones.

Gene Siskel: I have to agree with you on this one, Roger

Roger Ebert:  And there you have it, folks—two thumbs up for “The Restaurant Couple” and two thumbs down for the emotional wreck.  And I have to say to that poor guy she’s dating—dude, you really have to ditch that bitch…..

lmao!