Poems About Separation Seeking Honest Critique
#separation
Poems about separation seeking honest critique. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
NoQuarter
Poem Published
17th Feb 2025 11:48am
17th Feb 2025 11:48am
Muted Life
A pane of glass separates me from the world. Not literal, though sometimes I wish it were. Easier to explain. This is a different kind of barrier. A film over my senses. The vibrant shades of life muted, the clamor of voices distant, like listening to a symphony through thick walls. I know it's there. I can feel the vibrations, a faint tremor of feeling. But the melody, the full richness of experience, is lost to me.
I watch people—their easy laughter, their intertwined hands, the way they lean into conversations, fully present. I see it all, catalog it, analyze it. Words form in...
I watch people—their easy laughter, their intertwined hands, the way they lean into conversations, fully present. I see it all, catalog it, analyze it. Words form in...
#identity
#separation
#silence
104 reads
3 Comments
NP_NP
Poem Published
6th Feb 2025 7:57pm
6th Feb 2025 7:57pm
It Is What It Is
What’s my next move?
I’m scared to dip my toe,
Petrified of every step,
Afraid of what I’ll never know.
But it’s necessary,
I can’t stay in your shadow,
There’s more to life than what you gave,
I need to find it, to let go.
My heart hurts, whether you see or not,
But let’s not dwell in all the ugly,
I won’t point fingers, or play the violin,
No, I owe no one an explanation.
If they ask, I’ll simply say—
It is what it is, and nothing more,
No excuses needed, not...
I’m scared to dip my toe,
Petrified of every step,
Afraid of what I’ll never know.
But it’s necessary,
I can’t stay in your shadow,
There’s more to life than what you gave,
I need to find it, to let go.
My heart hurts, whether you see or not,
But let’s not dwell in all the ugly,
I won’t point fingers, or play the violin,
No, I owe no one an explanation.
If they ask, I’ll simply say—
It is what it is, and nothing more,
No excuses needed, not...
#breakup
#emotions
#heartbroken
#hurt
#separation
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0 Comments
Stoney223
WOLF BAY33
WOLF BAY33
Poem Published
5th Feb 2025 2:47pm
5th Feb 2025 2:47pm
How will you know
They say that through this passage of life, we will go through somethings in order, to get the full true understanding of how life truly works, whether for you are against you in search of what you want and need. How will you know that the next person, 🤔 that tries to walk into your life and world. YOU have to learn to listen, not to only what they say, but what they came to do, for if they ain't coming in your life with a positive attitude with real communications skills. TO articulate to you and show you there honestly and truth and trust, just stop and look and listen not to your...
#betrayal
#conflict
#deception
#manipulation
#separation
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mitjima
Lunarbitsh
Lunarbitsh
Poem Published
26th Jan 2025 8:57am
26th Jan 2025 8:57am
"If only" Pt.1
the white witch only wore black
black blouse.
black skirt.
black dress.
with a pencil in her hair and a sharp tongue to match
she longed for an ordinary life
something acceptable
. . . honorable and noble.
Awakened
by a
fiery fairy
of stained glass and stone
Enveloped in stillness and fascination ...
black blouse.
black skirt.
black dress.
with a pencil in her hair and a sharp tongue to match
she longed for an ordinary life
something acceptable
. . . honorable and noble.
Awakened
by a
fiery fairy
of stained glass and stone
Enveloped in stillness and fascination ...
#curse
#friendship
#separation #tragedy
#separation #tragedy
71 reads
1 Comment
moon_bather
Poem Published
22nd Jan 2025 3:51am
22nd Jan 2025 3:51am
Regurgitated Rumination
Remember that time
When we were happy?
The noise of the world
Could not stop us
Though they slapped us
With desperate warnings
We wrote them off
As jealous nothings
Together we broke
Molds and habits
At the end of the day
We did not give two shits
Discarded their sayings
Those stark warnings
Discounting every word
to live wholeheartedly
We ignored wisdom
Gave into delirium
To live our life of beauty
To live in hedonism
When we were happy?
The noise of the world
Could not stop us
Though they slapped us
With desperate warnings
We wrote them off
As jealous nothings
Together we broke
Molds and habits
At the end of the day
We did not give two shits
Discarded their sayings
Those stark warnings
Discounting every word
to live wholeheartedly
We ignored wisdom
Gave into delirium
To live our life of beauty
To live in hedonism
#breakup
#memories
#misunderstood
#nostalgia
#separation
92 reads
2 Comments
ThePalestRider
Poem Published
6th Jan 2025 8:58pm
6th Jan 2025 8:58pm
The Insidious Decay
Clambering through the frosted wood
I seek the warmth of hearth and home
Somewhere pure, somewhere good
With family and leather tomes
My feet falter at the village's edge
Yet the cold does not sting my skin
To them, I’d sworn a sacred pledge
I’d return, though laden with sin
Oh, how I long to see their face
Lifted from the frozen ground
I even brought fine sheets and lace
So happy now to be found
I knock upon their wooden door
It opens, and I sense their fear
Their trembling hands drop items to the floor ...
I seek the warmth of hearth and home
Somewhere pure, somewhere good
With family and leather tomes
My feet falter at the village's edge
Yet the cold does not sting my skin
To them, I’d sworn a sacred pledge
I’d return, though laden with sin
Oh, how I long to see their face
Lifted from the frozen ground
I even brought fine sheets and lace
So happy now to be found
I knock upon their wooden door
It opens, and I sense their fear
Their trembling hands drop items to the floor ...
#dark
#death
#fear
#graveyard
#separation
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fallen_stardust
galaxia
galaxia
Poem Published
6th Jan 2025 8:53am
6th Jan 2025 8:53am
Smoked Glass Hearts
Darling,
What was between us, was just glass,
But it was not what we thought it to be.
Transparent, but something askew,
Opaque, but something still there.
We kept burning it with flaws,
So we left the future to repair.
Incandescent screams,
Stabbed winks above.
Darkening our dreams,
I love how we once called this love.
Was it only our fault,
Or was it written in the stars?
Because we were never more than,
Little smoked glass hearts.
What was between us, was just glass,
But it was not what we thought it to be.
Transparent, but something askew,
Opaque, but something still there.
We kept burning it with flaws,
So we left the future to repair.
Incandescent screams,
Stabbed winks above.
Darkening our dreams,
I love how we once called this love.
Was it only our fault,
Or was it written in the stars?
Because we were never more than,
Little smoked glass hearts.
#crush
#love
#regret #separation
#regret #separation
128 reads
2 Comments
Revisionary
Poem Published
2nd Jan 2025 7:04am
2nd Jan 2025 7:04am
Lady Desire
I give up on needing you
Cared about yourself
More than you cared to help
Yeah, yeah “all in this for myself”.
Anchored in, weighing me down
Yet I’m think I’m feeling something else
I forgot to swim
In a sea of gin.
Instead, I drunk it all!
Cheers! To everyone
A toast to sin
When the grandeur fades, I fall
Through the glaze you look great
All I wanted is one taste.
Bottle up all my devotion
To the brim, while seduction is a bonus.
Long wavy hair
Pretty blue eyes
Oh my...
Cared about yourself
More than you cared to help
Yeah, yeah “all in this for myself”.
Anchored in, weighing me down
Yet I’m think I’m feeling something else
I forgot to swim
In a sea of gin.
Instead, I drunk it all!
Cheers! To everyone
A toast to sin
When the grandeur fades, I fall
Through the glaze you look great
All I wanted is one taste.
Bottle up all my devotion
To the brim, while seduction is a bonus.
Long wavy hair
Pretty blue eyes
Oh my...
#bittersweet
#loneliness
#MovingOn
#separation
#temptation
103 reads
1 Comment
84tabby
Sky99
Sky99
Poem Published
16th Dec 2024 7:02pm
16th Dec 2024 7:02pm
With u gone
With u gone seems like a nightmare. Feelings of worthlessness and lonely ness to much to bare. Feels like I am running out of air. Walls closing in so heavy and cold. The pain of u gone is to much to bare. The days drag on like an endless parade. Depression holding me down leaving me gasping for air. My light is dieing in side but can't see it from the outside. Wishing u was here. 2 years needs to already be here. So life can go on and I can be happy again.
#heartbroken
#loneliness
#sadness #separation
#sadness #separation
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sgtvasquezg
G. Vasquez
G. Vasquez
Poem Published
11th Dec 2024 4:52pm
11th Dec 2024 4:52pm
Marriage Life
I'm use to spending my days in bad weather.
Hot, cold, sleet, snow, whiteouts it didn't matter.
Pushing myself to the limits because I hated to see you sick.
Who would have thought that the moments away would be the reason that we'd eventually split.
Thank God you made it through and now the kids are grown.
The only down fall is I'm sitting at this table eating breakfast all alone.
When just 10 years ago I was singing to a different tune.
I can't say I hate you because yes I understand you, even though sometimes I wish it wasn't true.
On the outside...
Hot, cold, sleet, snow, whiteouts it didn't matter.
Pushing myself to the limits because I hated to see you sick.
Who would have thought that the moments away would be the reason that we'd eventually split.
Thank God you made it through and now the kids are grown.
The only down fall is I'm sitting at this table eating breakfast all alone.
When just 10 years ago I was singing to a different tune.
I can't say I hate you because yes I understand you, even though sometimes I wish it wasn't true.
On the outside...
#husband
#love
#marriage
#separation
#wife
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sgtvasquezg
G. Vasquez
G. Vasquez
Poem Published
11th Dec 2024 6:13am
11th Dec 2024 6:13am
Technical KnockOut
I know it's been a minute since I've placed a call.
But I had to pick myself up from when you made me fall.
It's definitely your fault that now I'm afraid of heights.
Who would have thought then, not to let this love take flight.
Like a pitbull, you sure do got a bite.
Protecting my left, as you swing with your right.
Love taps, thinking who turned out the lights.
Counting out loud but hearing them as ABC's.
Thinking how did this girl get me on my knees.
There's no doubt that you won that bout.
Now I'm training my mind that I can live...
But I had to pick myself up from when you made me fall.
It's definitely your fault that now I'm afraid of heights.
Who would have thought then, not to let this love take flight.
Like a pitbull, you sure do got a bite.
Protecting my left, as you swing with your right.
Love taps, thinking who turned out the lights.
Counting out loud but hearing them as ABC's.
Thinking how did this girl get me on my knees.
There's no doubt that you won that bout.
Now I'm training my mind that I can live...
#breakup
#heartbroken
#love
#relationships
#separation
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sgtvasquezg
G. Vasquez
G. Vasquez
Poem Published
23rd Nov 2024 8:28am
23rd Nov 2024 8:28am
Where I Lie
As I look up at the night sky, I see exactly where I lie.
Right there in the darkness, far away from all the lights.
Where the void is vast, and not a twinkle in sight.
I shiver outside in the cold, wondering the how and the why.
Refusing to think, that this was all just a lie.
I guess I am where I am, solely alone on this night.
Not a conversation to be had, but the one within my mind.
Slightly afraid, to figure out what it is that I'll find.
But I remain optimistic, that there is still a you and I.
Right there in the darkness, far away from all the lights.
Where the void is vast, and not a twinkle in sight.
I shiver outside in the cold, wondering the how and the why.
Refusing to think, that this was all just a lie.
I guess I am where I am, solely alone on this night.
Not a conversation to be had, but the one within my mind.
Slightly afraid, to figure out what it is that I'll find.
But I remain optimistic, that there is still a you and I.
#despair
#LongDistanceRelationship
#separation
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2 Comments
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