Poems About Separation Seeking Honest Critique
#separation
Poems about separation seeking honest critique. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
sgtvasquezg
G. Vasquez
G. Vasquez
Poem Published
Yesterday 8:45pm
Yesterday 8:45pm
Baiting The Wind
She came as a cool autumn breeze, blowing about wildly and free.
Her presence touched every inch of me, from my head down to my feet.
She whispered in my ear, faint sounds that I could barely make out.
Other than the words I love you, that, I felt without a doubt.
She easily moved everything around me, from the tallest trees to the smallest blades of grass.
But it all stopped suddenly, so I sit here pondering and I ask,
"Where did my wind go? Why did it have to go by so fast?
I've contemplated plans of capture to perfection, baiting a kite for the next...
Her presence touched every inch of me, from my head down to my feet.
She whispered in my ear, faint sounds that I could barely make out.
Other than the words I love you, that, I felt without a doubt.
She easily moved everything around me, from the tallest trees to the smallest blades of grass.
But it all stopped suddenly, so I sit here pondering and I ask,
"Where did my wind go? Why did it have to go by so fast?
I've contemplated plans of capture to perfection, baiting a kite for the next...
#IMissYou
#LongDistanceRelationship
#love
#relationships
#separation
41 reads
0 Comments
SeaCat
Poem Published
19th Nov 2024 11:51pm
19th Nov 2024 11:51pm
Alien
It’s a seed sprouting,
a cold plant, spreading like a misty
forget-me-not.
When the familiar becomes thin, veiled
without colour or substance.
Far-off, disconnected,
as if I had been transported, between
blinks, to a pale Andromedean planet
with unfathomable languages and unrecognisable shapes.
The grass is green, but
not. The sky is blue, but not. The sun shines hot
but with a stony face.
Everything orbits a glowing abyss ,
and distant events and...
a cold plant, spreading like a misty
forget-me-not.
When the familiar becomes thin, veiled
without colour or substance.
Far-off, disconnected,
as if I had been transported, between
blinks, to a pale Andromedean planet
with unfathomable languages and unrecognisable shapes.
The grass is green, but
not. The sky is blue, but not. The sun shines hot
but with a stony face.
Everything orbits a glowing abyss ,
and distant events and...
#bittersweet
#memories
#nostalgia #separation
#nostalgia #separation
37 reads
4 Comments
PAR
Poem Published
12th Nov 2024 5:14pm
12th Nov 2024 5:14pm
Why have you forsaken me?
Dawn of our journey.
We found our path,
an embrace like a first station,
hope in every breath.
Together we walked facing fears
in the sacred spring.
The weight of the cross came
as doubt whispered in the wind.
Our love staggered under its heavy burden.
With each step, the road grew steeper,
yet, we bore the weight
through shared tears and laughter.
We stumbled and fell thrice
in moments of despair.
We rose, driven by the light in our eyes.
Giving strength to carry on and believe in us.
...
We found our path,
an embrace like a first station,
hope in every breath.
Together we walked facing fears
in the sacred spring.
The weight of the cross came
as doubt whispered in the wind.
Our love staggered under its heavy burden.
With each step, the road grew steeper,
yet, we bore the weight
through shared tears and laughter.
We stumbled and fell thrice
in moments of despair.
We rose, driven by the light in our eyes.
Giving strength to carry on and believe in us.
...
#despair
#lust
#passion
#rejection
#separation
67 reads
4 Comments
DamianDeadLove
Poem Published
9th Nov 2024 6:50am
9th Nov 2024 6:50am
The Great Divide
So much pain sent within a shockwave
Voices turn silent when riddled with fear
Wearing a face that only appears brave
Underneath it stirs a torment more severe
Out in the ether the air has grown dense
Seems the grass is dead on the other side
Been swindled under some false pretense
Karma was instant sparking the great divide
Copyright @ Damian DeadLove 2024
Voices turn silent when riddled with fear
Wearing a face that only appears brave
Underneath it stirs a torment more severe
Out in the ether the air has grown dense
Seems the grass is dead on the other side
Been swindled under some false pretense
Karma was instant sparking the great divide
Copyright @ Damian DeadLove 2024
#separation
114 reads
18 Comments
LunasChild8
Poem Published
20th Oct 2024 00:53am
20th Oct 2024 00:53am
To Love You Again
Broken promises and lost dreams
This dead relationship that once was so sweet
Who I was then and who I am now
Have learned to reconcile as much as my heart allowed.
The past is the past; the future has yet to come
I’m feeling once again when I used to be numb
My heart, my life, my soul
The shattered pieces of me have become whole.
Hush child, it’s okay to cry
You’ve been strong for so long, and you’ll continue to soar high
Love hurts, but that’s part of the journey
Some people are meant to be left in a memory.
If I...
This dead relationship that once was so sweet
Who I was then and who I am now
Have learned to reconcile as much as my heart allowed.
The past is the past; the future has yet to come
I’m feeling once again when I used to be numb
My heart, my life, my soul
The shattered pieces of me have become whole.
Hush child, it’s okay to cry
You’ve been strong for so long, and you’ll continue to soar high
Love hurts, but that’s part of the journey
Some people are meant to be left in a memory.
If I...
#breakup
#love
#MovingOn
#rhyming
#separation
158 reads
8 Comments
LostViking
Lost Viking
Lost Viking
Poem Published
10th Oct 2024 1:50pm
10th Oct 2024 1:50pm
Erasure of an Inconvenient Life - True Crime #1
I consider it a great privilege to witness the passing of a soul into eternity, whatever that may be. There is something miraculous about the quickness of the transitions and emotional changes sometimes involved. It was such with Susan, a 44-year-old divorced mother of three in a Chicago suburb.
I remember my own days of youthful exuberance, though they were spent far from the pomp and pageantry of Susan's. Her teenage years were a portrait of American virtue—a tableau of school spirit and ambition. She had been the epitome of the all-American girl, her days a blur of pom-poms,...
I remember my own days of youthful exuberance, though they were spent far from the pomp and pageantry of Susan's. Her teenage years were a portrait of American virtue—a tableau of school spirit and ambition. She had been the epitome of the all-American girl, her days a blur of pom-poms,...
#money
#murder
#separation
115 reads
3 Comments
oldmanG
Poem Published
9th Oct 2024 1:26pm
9th Oct 2024 1:26pm
Damaged with a Soft Heart
Damaged with a soft heart
If you said you would come
Back to me down on my knees
Kisses to heaven and I’m restored
Been a ghost hangin round the periphery
No soul in my heart til you come back to me
Im ephemeral just a mist
I slip in and out of darkness
Tryin to access madness I’m livin in
Know I can fill the part
But I’m really damaged with a soft heart
But if I heard a little bird say that
You would come back to me
I could come back around and
Show my true heart the heart you...
If you said you would come
Back to me down on my knees
Kisses to heaven and I’m restored
Been a ghost hangin round the periphery
No soul in my heart til you come back to me
Im ephemeral just a mist
I slip in and out of darkness
Tryin to access madness I’m livin in
Know I can fill the part
But I’m really damaged with a soft heart
But if I heard a little bird say that
You would come back to me
I could come back around and
Show my true heart the heart you...
#bittersweet
#ghosts
#regret #separation
#regret #separation
105 reads
0 Comments
LunasChild8
Poem Published
8th Oct 2024 11:26pm
8th Oct 2024 11:26pm
Relinquish
Faith in myself
Is the only substance keeping me going in this waking hell
Held in a divine embrace
The world smudges into a blur as I wonder at my own pace.
I set off into the darkness to cast the divine light
I rose up from the ashes to continue the fight
Hazy dreams are all that remain
I no longer have the willpower to play this mind game.
Come and find me in your memories
I gave you life every time I’d bleed
My flesh and soul were offered willingly
Now you’re left with ashes and lost dreams.
Our connection had a...
Is the only substance keeping me going in this waking hell
Held in a divine embrace
The world smudges into a blur as I wonder at my own pace.
I set off into the darkness to cast the divine light
I rose up from the ashes to continue the fight
Hazy dreams are all that remain
I no longer have the willpower to play this mind game.
Come and find me in your memories
I gave you life every time I’d bleed
My flesh and soul were offered willingly
Now you’re left with ashes and lost dreams.
Our connection had a...
#bittersweet
#memories
#MovingOn
#rhyming
#separation
116 reads
6 Comments
dead_lluwi
Poem Published
5th Oct 2024 2:50pm
5th Oct 2024 2:50pm
dead beat
The season of love has ended and so did we—
Those few days with you didn’t strengthen me. Instead, you broke my perception of love. The idea of liking someone felt tangible. Yet just like Icarus, I fell down in flames, burned my wings,incinerated. It disappeared into ashes that flew away along with my senses.
The thought of me being in one. Perhaps I'll enter when the crows shed its wings, transforming its dark feathers into snow coloured ones. Possibly when the heavens crashed with the earth and turned the world upside down. But for the...
Those few days with you didn’t strengthen me. Instead, you broke my perception of love. The idea of liking someone felt tangible. Yet just like Icarus, I fell down in flames, burned my wings,incinerated. It disappeared into ashes that flew away along with my senses.
The thought of me being in one. Perhaps I'll enter when the crows shed its wings, transforming its dark feathers into snow coloured ones. Possibly when the heavens crashed with the earth and turned the world upside down. But for the...
#bittersweet
#breakup
#MovingOn
#separation
#UnrequitedLove
93 reads
0 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
3rd Oct 2024 8:56pm
3rd Oct 2024 8:56pm
Generic Existence
He goes to the same job everyday.
He comes home to his wife every night.
They rarely touch each other.
Only on special occasions, like birthday's and Columbus Day.
There not attracted to each other anymore.
They don't make a fuss about it.
A few years back, they were fighting and swearing that they were going to leave one another.
When the fighting subsided, they both realized they were both a bunch of cowards.
Neither one had the courage to go out and meet someone else.
They don't despise one another.
They are friendly roommates waiting for...
He comes home to his wife every night.
They rarely touch each other.
Only on special occasions, like birthday's and Columbus Day.
There not attracted to each other anymore.
They don't make a fuss about it.
A few years back, they were fighting and swearing that they were going to leave one another.
When the fighting subsided, they both realized they were both a bunch of cowards.
Neither one had the courage to go out and meet someone else.
They don't despise one another.
They are friendly roommates waiting for...
#emptiness
#frustration
#marriage #separation
#marriage #separation
86 reads
6 Comments
B_xav_jay
Poem Published
25th Sep 2024 7:27pm
25th Sep 2024 7:27pm
Bandaids
Time
It comes and it goes
Something’s aren’t meant to last forever
What started off as I love you
Slowly turned to I hate you
Or maybe I hate myself
For loving you so much
You’ve torn me down and broken me
For that I should be grateful
Or so you remind me
I deserved it it’s all my fault
Or so you remind me
You stripped me of my pride
You stripped me of my dignity
And between the bruises
I love yous meant like bandaids
But they don’t band do they
And through it all
My...
It comes and it goes
Something’s aren’t meant to last forever
What started off as I love you
Slowly turned to I hate you
Or maybe I hate myself
For loving you so much
You’ve torn me down and broken me
For that I should be grateful
Or so you remind me
I deserved it it’s all my fault
Or so you remind me
You stripped me of my pride
You stripped me of my dignity
And between the bruises
I love yous meant like bandaids
But they don’t band do they
And through it all
My...
#DomesticViolence
#manipulation
#MovingOn
#sadness
#separation
96 reads
0 Comments
Sageofsongs
Poem Published
8th Sep 2024 8:24am
8th Sep 2024 8:24am
Nice Guy Chronicles IX
It's crazy to see people begin to settle down,
it's a natural process of life
However it's just crazy when you look at people you've known forever begin to change and mature
Life has happened to everyone and
I found myself being 'the single friend'
I really didn't notice until one day, I was at a get together and I was literally the only single person there.
It didn't bother me though because I've grown really comfortable with myself.
Also seeing happy people makes me happy.
Now the thing is 'the single friend' tends to be...
it's a natural process of life
However it's just crazy when you look at people you've known forever begin to change and mature
Life has happened to everyone and
I found myself being 'the single friend'
I really didn't notice until one day, I was at a get together and I was literally the only single person there.
It didn't bother me though because I've grown really comfortable with myself.
Also seeing happy people makes me happy.
Now the thing is 'the single friend' tends to be...
#bittersweet
#disappointment
#friendship #separation
#friendship #separation
104 reads
0 Comments
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