Gothic Seeking Honest Critique Poems
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gothic seeking honest critique poems. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
darkburden
Poem Published
26th Oct 2024 4:08am
26th Oct 2024 4:08am
Distraction
She is, the kind of distraction,
I didn’t know I needed,
I… Follow her… Everywhere… Now;
Bet she tastes good,
She has too,
I would be SO disappointed now,
If she didn’t,
and would need yet,
Another, how shall we say it,
Distraction,
From my work,
That which I was born into this world
…To do…
I didn’t know I needed,
I… Follow her… Everywhere… Now;
Bet she tastes good,
She has too,
I would be SO disappointed now,
If she didn’t,
and would need yet,
Another, how shall we say it,
Distraction,
From my work,
That which I was born into this world
…To do…
#dark
#fate
#gothic
#narrative
#obsession
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crimsin
Unveiling
Unveiling
Poem Published
20th Oct 2024 9:03pm
20th Oct 2024 9:03pm
easy now...
Darkly ushers me closer
bidden to come forth I do with hesitation
beings of foreboding are recognized cavorting
with limericks dripping in satirical wit
wry with irony He doesn't speak anything else
if not sarcastic why bother
dripping of sinful trust
seeking fulfillment assaults the senses
a minute of sensitivity
blushing that he has entered my humility
tenderly, surprising enough
perhaps I have been missed
still, I pause, is this trickery dickery or not?
the spirits open the doors of...
bidden to come forth I do with hesitation
beings of foreboding are recognized cavorting
with limericks dripping in satirical wit
wry with irony He doesn't speak anything else
if not sarcastic why bother
dripping of sinful trust
seeking fulfillment assaults the senses
a minute of sensitivity
blushing that he has entered my humility
tenderly, surprising enough
perhaps I have been missed
still, I pause, is this trickery dickery or not?
the spirits open the doors of...
#gothic
#love
138 reads
7 Comments
darkburden
Poem Published
14th Oct 2024 1:27am
14th Oct 2024 1:27am
Fantasy of Want
I love it, to hear them suffer
Cause that shit is true
They aint faking it
No, they are living it
They are taking it, every damn moment of it
and are involuntarily reacting to it
They feel it, see it, smell it, taste it,
They are in my world
And here, I rule with an iron fist
God, it turns me on so
In heat and rain,
Alone with friends
It matters little
I have the strength
Strength to make my fantasy of want take its course
Cause that shit is true
They aint faking it
No, they are living it
They are taking it, every damn moment of it
and are involuntarily reacting to it
They feel it, see it, smell it, taste it,
They are in my world
And here, I rule with an iron fist
God, it turns me on so
In heat and rain,
Alone with friends
It matters little
I have the strength
Strength to make my fantasy of want take its course
#gothic
#narrative
169 reads
1 Comment
ThePalestRider
Poem Published
11th Oct 2024 10:05am
11th Oct 2024 10:05am
The Thing That Dances
The wind doth howl, the night is long
A shadow stirs, a twisted song
In hollow fields, where none may tread
A shape doth dance amongst the dead
Its limbs are thin, its form unclear
It moves with grace that none draw near
No voice it hath, nor breath, nor cry
Yet still it weaves beneath the sky
The moon doth weep, the stars grow cold
As ancient steps and tales unfold
For in the dark, beyond the eye
It twirls and turns, though none know why
What doom it brings, what curse it bears
Is hid beneath the midnight airs...
A shadow stirs, a twisted song
In hollow fields, where none may tread
A shape doth dance amongst the dead
Its limbs are thin, its form unclear
It moves with grace that none draw near
No voice it hath, nor breath, nor cry
Yet still it weaves beneath the sky
The moon doth weep, the stars grow cold
As ancient steps and tales unfold
For in the dark, beyond the eye
It twirls and turns, though none know why
What doom it brings, what curse it bears
Is hid beneath the midnight airs...
#dance
#dark
#gothic #rhyming
#gothic #rhyming
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ThePalestRider
Poem Published
26th Sep 2024 9:08pm
26th Sep 2024 9:08pm
Ruins By Moonlight
Through the shadowed arches of ivy
Under moonlight’s cold, distant stare
I have wandered this forest so empty
Where the ruins of time hold despair;
And I weep at the stillness that beckons, feeling presences twist through the air
I have danced with the winds through the branches, Where the trees form a tunnel of night
I have seen the lost faces of angels
In the ruins’ ghost-haunted light;
Where the walls, once proud and resplendent, crumble and fade out of sight
I have stood where the gravestones lie scattered,
And the earth...
Under moonlight’s cold, distant stare
I have wandered this forest so empty
Where the ruins of time hold despair;
And I weep at the stillness that beckons, feeling presences twist through the air
I have danced with the winds through the branches, Where the trees form a tunnel of night
I have seen the lost faces of angels
In the ruins’ ghost-haunted light;
Where the walls, once proud and resplendent, crumble and fade out of sight
I have stood where the gravestones lie scattered,
And the earth...
#dark
#environment
#gothic
#narrative
#sadness
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2 Comments
ThePalestRider
Poem Published
24th Sep 2024 7:07am
24th Sep 2024 7:07am
Sorrow Ascendent Canto I
In distant realms, where silence reigns
Beyond the stars, beyond the chains
There weeps an angel draped in night
A shroud of sorrow, dimming light
Her wings, once bright with heaven's glow
Now fold beneath a weight they know
Each tear she sheds, a frozen stream
Falling through an endless dream
She wanders skies where none may tread
Amongst the lost, the lingering dead
The stars above, they flicker weak
Their light, a language she cannot speak
Her cry, a song of distant woe
Through hollow winds where shadows...
Beyond the stars, beyond the chains
There weeps an angel draped in night
A shroud of sorrow, dimming light
Her wings, once bright with heaven's glow
Now fold beneath a weight they know
Each tear she sheds, a frozen stream
Falling through an endless dream
She wanders skies where none may tread
Amongst the lost, the lingering dead
The stars above, they flicker weak
Their light, a language she cannot speak
Her cry, a song of distant woe
Through hollow winds where shadows...
#angels
#dark
#gothic
#narrative
#sadness
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Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
22nd Sep 2024 11:58am
22nd Sep 2024 11:58am
Daylight has come to end
What had been so long ago
Is only a mist in the snow
And for the cleanses that once had been made
Are simply my sins that did fade
And for what we've become is only ecstasy
And a dream, a vision of pure misery
Let me be the one to tell you all
Of hell's resurrection and heaven's fall
Sleep sweet damned woman for you are
Caused him to triumph and forever will abide
By his side
Moon demon, celestial star gazer
Be a comfort to me and not curse my kin
Wise of all liars, stalked from the start
And not to show thy...
Is only a mist in the snow
And for the cleanses that once had been made
Are simply my sins that did fade
And for what we've become is only ecstasy
And a dream, a vision of pure misery
Let me be the one to tell you all
Of hell's resurrection and heaven's fall
Sleep sweet damned woman for you are
Caused him to triumph and forever will abide
By his side
Moon demon, celestial star gazer
Be a comfort to me and not curse my kin
Wise of all liars, stalked from the start
And not to show thy...
#dark
#death
#earth
#friendship
#gothic
200 reads
8 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
22nd Sep 2024 11:53am
22nd Sep 2024 11:53am
Brides of dread
Greatness all we are
And everything we've become
In this world
Of dying gracious flowers
Poisoned at the roots
Bound together they are
By their twisted tongues
Brides of dread
Damned sisters dancing around
To musical chaos
Two spectres fly tonight
The hover close to my window
My sleeping dreams
Slipping into their fatal embrace
Triangle of pain
This is lust, this is love
Whatever it is I see my death
By their lovely hands
My blood fades into their veins
All passion undone
And everything we've become
In this world
Of dying gracious flowers
Poisoned at the roots
Bound together they are
By their twisted tongues
Brides of dread
Damned sisters dancing around
To musical chaos
Two spectres fly tonight
The hover close to my window
My sleeping dreams
Slipping into their fatal embrace
Triangle of pain
This is lust, this is love
Whatever it is I see my death
By their lovely hands
My blood fades into their veins
All passion undone
#dark
#death
#gothic
#love
#wife
125 reads
6 Comments
ThePalestRider
Poem Published
13th Sep 2024 6:12am
13th Sep 2024 6:12am
Great Devourer
A whisper crawls through void and night
A shroud that dims the astral light
No stars can pierce its ashen veil
No beacon bright nor comet’s trail
It chokes the ether, drowns the call
The silent dread that grips them all
A psychic fog, relentless, vast
Consuming futures, devouring past
An unseen tide that swallows thought
Where hopes and dreams are bound and caught
It feasts on prayers and rends the mind
Leaving only the hollow behind
A hunger born of endless black
A ceaseless thirst that won’t retract ...
A shroud that dims the astral light
No stars can pierce its ashen veil
No beacon bright nor comet’s trail
It chokes the ether, drowns the call
The silent dread that grips them all
A psychic fog, relentless, vast
Consuming futures, devouring past
An unseen tide that swallows thought
Where hopes and dreams are bound and caught
It feasts on prayers and rends the mind
Leaving only the hollow behind
A hunger born of endless black
A ceaseless thirst that won’t retract ...
#gothic
#rhyming
#scifi
#stars
#universe
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ThePalestRider
Poem Published
12th Sep 2024 4:08pm
12th Sep 2024 4:08pm
Shade Between Shadows
In the rift where shadows split
Where angles writhe and forms commit
To twisting paths of maddened flight
In shades that crawl beyond the night
Abyssal lines that tear and fray
Unholy curves that twist the day
No mortal mind could bear the sight
Of darkness folded, turned to blight
The pillars bend with jagged spite
Where geometry corrupts the light
A latticework of eldritch might
That pierces through the heart of sight
No sacred plane remains intact
...
Where angles writhe and forms commit
To twisting paths of maddened flight
In shades that crawl beyond the night
Abyssal lines that tear and fray
Unholy curves that twist the day
No mortal mind could bear the sight
Of darkness folded, turned to blight
The pillars bend with jagged spite
Where geometry corrupts the light
A latticework of eldritch might
That pierces through the heart of sight
No sacred plane remains intact
...
#dark
#gothic
#shadows #universe
#shadows #universe
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ThePalestRider
Poem Published
12th Sep 2024 5:18am
12th Sep 2024 5:18am
The Emperor's Angels
Iron halls and stone keep
Where saints and devils vigil keep
The Emperor's wrath in armor clad
Awaken from the battle’s mad
With sigils carved in blood and flame
They march where mortal tongues won’t name
The Angels forged in terror’s breath
The harbingers of crimson death
Their shadows stretch like whispered sins
Where holy light and night begins
For they are wrath and judgment's hand
The sentinels of a burning land
Their eyes aflame with ancient lore
Baptized in war forevermore
They chant in tongues of lost occult ...
Where saints and devils vigil keep
The Emperor's wrath in armor clad
Awaken from the battle’s mad
With sigils carved in blood and flame
They march where mortal tongues won’t name
The Angels forged in terror’s breath
The harbingers of crimson death
Their shadows stretch like whispered sins
Where holy light and night begins
For they are wrath and judgment's hand
The sentinels of a burning land
Their eyes aflame with ancient lore
Baptized in war forevermore
They chant in tongues of lost occult ...
#dark
#death
#fiction
#gothic
#shadows
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ThePalestRider
Poem Published
6th Sep 2024 5:07pm
6th Sep 2024 5:07pm
Diabolical Oculus
They walk behind with stolen tread
A mirror’s shade of pallid dread
No breath to speak, no eye to see
Yet mock the soul in mockery
They stalk the steps where shadows creep
And haunt the corners dark and deep
With hollow eyes and voiceless call
They mimic life, yet not at all
By Babylon's rivers, dark and wide
They steal the visions prophets cried
Like Jeremiah’s weeping scroll
They haunt the pathways of the soul
They carry words like whispers thin
With hints of wrath and hidden sin
Each gesture wrong, each smile askew...
A mirror’s shade of pallid dread
No breath to speak, no eye to see
Yet mock the soul in mockery
They stalk the steps where shadows creep
And haunt the corners dark and deep
With hollow eyes and voiceless call
They mimic life, yet not at all
By Babylon's rivers, dark and wide
They steal the visions prophets cried
Like Jeremiah’s weeping scroll
They haunt the pathways of the soul
They carry words like whispers thin
With hints of wrath and hidden sin
Each gesture wrong, each smile askew...
#dark
#ghosts
#gothic
#rhyming
#symbolism
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