Poems About Despair Seeking Honest Critique
#despair
Poems about despair seeking honest critique. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
fianaturie8
Fia Naturie
Fia Naturie
Poem Published
19th Feb 2025 8:41pm
19th Feb 2025 8:41pm
Mamas Don't
Text
Mama, please don’t leave
Daddy is having a hard time.
He said he can’t look at me
He cries all the time
Text
Mamas don’t usually go
You left me here, just me
Daddy is so angry
I just don’t understand this though
Text
Mama, Why don’t you come home?
Daddy has been gone
He leaves me here a lot on my own
I didn’t ask to be alone
Mama's Text
Baby girl, I’m sorry to say
I didn’t want to tell you when I left that day
I set your...
Mama, please don’t leave
Daddy is having a hard time.
He said he can’t look at me
He cries all the time
Text
Mamas don’t usually go
You left me here, just me
Daddy is so angry
I just don’t understand this though
Text
Mama, Why don’t you come home?
Daddy has been gone
He leaves me here a lot on my own
I didn’t ask to be alone
Mama's Text
Baby girl, I’m sorry to say
I didn’t want to tell you when I left that day
I set your...
#despair
#grief
#heartbroken
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Gorotika
Poem Published
19th Feb 2025 7:58pm
19th Feb 2025 7:58pm
dear death
Take me home, I beg of thee.
Take my hand, and set me free.
Dear death, please hear my plea
Release me from this misery.
Take my hand, and set me free.
Dear death, please hear my plea
Release me from this misery.
#dark
#death
#depression
#despair
#FeelingLost
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NP_NP
Poem Published
19th Feb 2025 7:30pm
19th Feb 2025 7:30pm
Restricted
Missed calls, unreturned texts,
But you still keep sending, keep reaching.
Always calling "Restricted,"
I told you, I couldn’t fix you.
You had to heal yourself.
But still, you said, "I can't do it alone."
I told you to trust, to walk through the door,
That little boy’s waiting for you.
I put your baby picture in your hand,
Told you to love him—tell him you do.
But you punched holes in walls,
And in my soul,
Screaming that this was all so stupid,
That none of this mattered...
But you still keep sending, keep reaching.
Always calling "Restricted,"
I told you, I couldn’t fix you.
You had to heal yourself.
But still, you said, "I can't do it alone."
I told you to trust, to walk through the door,
That little boy’s waiting for you.
I put your baby picture in your hand,
Told you to love him—tell him you do.
But you punched holes in walls,
And in my soul,
Screaming that this was all so stupid,
That none of this mattered...
#confessional
#dark
#despair
#LifeStruggles
#PersonalGrowth
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Nil
Nolan
Nolan
Poem Published
19th Feb 2025 7:19pm
19th Feb 2025 7:19pm
The Draft
Am I there with you in the trenches.
No.
I'm out here in the street getting beaten to a pulp.
So.
Maybe.
You should offer a prayer to the drunks in the alley.
Instead.
Of.
All these pantomime heros cum body bags that glory in death.
At.
Least.
The violence I engage in isn't taken out on the onlookers, in fact, they cheer.
So much.
Less.
Collateral damage when I'm eating the curb and not a bullet.
So.
Potentially.
Don't come to me when you want some sort of violence you...
No.
I'm out here in the street getting beaten to a pulp.
So.
Maybe.
You should offer a prayer to the drunks in the alley.
Instead.
Of.
All these pantomime heros cum body bags that glory in death.
At.
Least.
The violence I engage in isn't taken out on the onlookers, in fact, they cheer.
So much.
Less.
Collateral damage when I'm eating the curb and not a bullet.
So.
Potentially.
Don't come to me when you want some sort of violence you...
#anger
#denial
#despair
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Mstrmnd1923
Poem Published
19th Feb 2025 4:23am
19th Feb 2025 4:23am
And There I Lay
And there I lay on the ground
In a puddle of blood my body drowned
Echoing thoughts that ricochet
My lifeless body now on display
The smoking gun still in my palm
A fleeting moment of peace and calm
But then suddenly shadows appeared
My peaceful thoughts disappeared
Demonic ravenous vultures biting
My motionless body no longer fighting
Dragging my carcass across the floor
My soul now exiting heavens door
Paying for sins of my haunted past
Dreams of hell now permanently last
Tortured twisted thoughts...
In a puddle of blood my body drowned
Echoing thoughts that ricochet
My lifeless body now on display
The smoking gun still in my palm
A fleeting moment of peace and calm
But then suddenly shadows appeared
My peaceful thoughts disappeared
Demonic ravenous vultures biting
My motionless body no longer fighting
Dragging my carcass across the floor
My soul now exiting heavens door
Paying for sins of my haunted past
Dreams of hell now permanently last
Tortured twisted thoughts...
#dark
#despair
#emptiness
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ThePalestRider
Poem Published
18th Feb 2025 4:32pm
18th Feb 2025 4:32pm
Emancipation From The Sun
In vaulted night where whispers dwell
A fell being, cloaked in shadowed spell
Drew breath of twilight, dark and deep
Amidst the silence that shadows keep
Beneath the gaze of the sun’s harsh eye
Chained by brilliance, yearning to fly
It cried to the moon in tones of despair
“Grant me release, from this radiant snare!”
“Thy golden rays, they scorch and bind
I seek the solace of the night to find
For in the gloam, my spirit can soar
Awake the dreams that darkness bore.”
Echoes of silence where phantoms tread ...
A fell being, cloaked in shadowed spell
Drew breath of twilight, dark and deep
Amidst the silence that shadows keep
Beneath the gaze of the sun’s harsh eye
Chained by brilliance, yearning to fly
It cried to the moon in tones of despair
“Grant me release, from this radiant snare!”
“Thy golden rays, they scorch and bind
I seek the solace of the night to find
For in the gloam, my spirit can soar
Awake the dreams that darkness bore.”
Echoes of silence where phantoms tread ...
#dark
#despair
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AmyMMosier
Poem Published
16th Feb 2025 5:49pm
16th Feb 2025 5:49pm
A nice prescription of sleep
A nice prescription of sleep
I took when the day proved awry
And found myself when I blinked
In a dreamscape of its own kind.
I could hardly believe it
But I saw a meadow without end;
I stopped my crying to think
Of where the tiller went.
I saw in hues that'd never been;
The sky emoted rest.
That place - known only to me -
Brought me there at behest
And of time? What did it mean
To the birds above the field?
To the excitable bee
Nourished by a fallen tear?
Suddenly - I...
I took when the day proved awry
And found myself when I blinked
In a dreamscape of its own kind.
I could hardly believe it
But I saw a meadow without end;
I stopped my crying to think
Of where the tiller went.
I saw in hues that'd never been;
The sky emoted rest.
That place - known only to me -
Brought me there at behest
And of time? What did it mean
To the birds above the field?
To the excitable bee
Nourished by a fallen tear?
Suddenly - I...
#despair
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ChloesPoeticInk
Poem Published
14th Feb 2025 12:20pm
14th Feb 2025 12:20pm
Goodbye
Rest In Peace to Myself.
The final call has been made, and with it, a quiet goodbye to what's been.
The Last salute offered to the memories, the moments, and the pieces of me that once lived here.
It's time to let go, to rest in the stillness that follows the end of a chapter.
The journey has closed, and the silence speaks now, but in that silence, there's peace.
The past is no longer mine to carry. It's time to rest.
Goodbye.
The final call has been made, and with it, a quiet goodbye to what's been.
The Last salute offered to the memories, the moments, and the pieces of me that once lived here.
It's time to let go, to rest in the stillness that follows the end of a chapter.
The journey has closed, and the silence speaks now, but in that silence, there's peace.
The past is no longer mine to carry. It's time to rest.
Goodbye.
#bittersweet
#despair
#loneliness
#regret
#sadness
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ThePalestRider
Poem Published
14th Feb 2025 6:08am
14th Feb 2025 6:08am
The Flayed Hand Cometh
Winds sigh low
Whispers slither in the dust
Fires wane, embers choke
The flayed hand cometh
Sky turns grey
Sun bleeds thin behind the veil
Roots twist, drinking deep
The flayed hand cometh
Ash coats the tongue
Water blackens in the wells
Statues weep from hollow eyes
The flayed hand cometh
Walls split wide
Stone and bone collapse alike
Screams dissolve into the void
The flayed hand cometh
Veins run dry
Flesh peels back in offering
A name unspoken stirs awake
The flayed hand...
Whispers slither in the dust
Fires wane, embers choke
The flayed hand cometh
Sky turns grey
Sun bleeds thin behind the veil
Roots twist, drinking deep
The flayed hand cometh
Ash coats the tongue
Water blackens in the wells
Statues weep from hollow eyes
The flayed hand cometh
Walls split wide
Stone and bone collapse alike
Screams dissolve into the void
The flayed hand cometh
Veins run dry
Flesh peels back in offering
A name unspoken stirs awake
The flayed hand...
#dark
#despair
#fear
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PunkPoe
Poem Published
13th Feb 2025 8:56pm
13th Feb 2025 8:56pm
Aftershokk
"Aftershokk"
I stand on the edge of bridges burnt
I'm choking on the lessons I've learnt
Will karma really bite me in the ass?
I'm trapped in sands of an hourglass
I watch my life through the filthy pain
Every bit of my love will slowly drain
Atrocity rushes in my soul to rupture
What will cease my lifetime of torture?
All I really need is a hollow point bullet
I'll muster up the courage & just pull it!
Will I feel my brains paint these walls?
Or sense the gravity as my body falls?
Because...
I stand on the edge of bridges burnt
I'm choking on the lessons I've learnt
Will karma really bite me in the ass?
I'm trapped in sands of an hourglass
I watch my life through the filthy pain
Every bit of my love will slowly drain
Atrocity rushes in my soul to rupture
What will cease my lifetime of torture?
All I really need is a hollow point bullet
I'll muster up the courage & just pull it!
Will I feel my brains paint these walls?
Or sense the gravity as my body falls?
Because...
#death
#depression
#despair
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poet5678
CHUCKLES 123
CHUCKLES 123
Poem Published
13th Feb 2025 3:47pm
13th Feb 2025 3:47pm
Goodbye Dad
Goodbye Dad
I am heart broken
That I have lost you
So fast
I can't stop crying
Yes I could never believe
That you had to part so soon
But deep down
I could not stand to see you
Suffer every day
Battling you disease
I tried to make you
Comfortable
Also I had to be strong for you
And it is very hard to do
Yes you lost you battle
And at the same time
It was hard to see you leave
This earth
But at the same time
I must understand that
You are in a better place them me
You are living a new...
I am heart broken
That I have lost you
So fast
I can't stop crying
Yes I could never believe
That you had to part so soon
But deep down
I could not stand to see you
Suffer every day
Battling you disease
I tried to make you
Comfortable
Also I had to be strong for you
And it is very hard to do
Yes you lost you battle
And at the same time
It was hard to see you leave
This earth
But at the same time
I must understand that
You are in a better place them me
You are living a new...
#despair
#disappointment
#grief
#heartbroken
#shame
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James_A_Knight
Poem Published
12th Feb 2025 4:41pm
12th Feb 2025 4:41pm
Rattle Snake's Kiss
Can you hear the sound of the world?
As it destroys itself
As it rebuilds itself
As it collapses under
Birdsong petroleum machines
Can you hear the engines?
Screaming downward
Towards an unfathomable abyss
You’ve heard it before
And it left you in pain
It is painful to know
The painkiller is ignorance
Denial, stupidity, and hate.
Media manufactured hate
Bubbling beneath the flesh
Every breath simmering
Coiled ready to pounce
Upon somebody different to you
It is painful to...
As it destroys itself
As it rebuilds itself
As it collapses under
Birdsong petroleum machines
Can you hear the engines?
Screaming downward
Towards an unfathomable abyss
You’ve heard it before
And it left you in pain
It is painful to know
The painkiller is ignorance
Denial, stupidity, and hate.
Media manufactured hate
Bubbling beneath the flesh
Every breath simmering
Coiled ready to pounce
Upon somebody different to you
It is painful to...
#despair
#greed
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