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Oh Yeah
To adore her own pedestal
restrained with desire
coy knowing eyes
shine brazen smiles which
claw tweaks and defile
something delicate,
oh those oft’ defined cries
amidst impassioned embraces encouraging life.
restrained with desire
coy knowing eyes
shine brazen smiles which
claw tweaks and defile
something delicate,
oh those oft’ defined cries
amidst impassioned embraces encouraging life.
Published 4th Apr 2013
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4th Apr 2013 11:26pm
Sounds like she needs a mate and "encouraging life" might belong as the final line to keep up the structure appealing to the eye, maybe? Cheers and still chuckling over that wonderful first line, thanks.
9th Apr 2013 7:18pm
You have a good point. Its something I have considered. It would make the structure more appealing to the eye but for me that is how it reads, and the sound is more important in my eyes. :)
Thanks for leaving a reply. Much appreciated. :)
Thanks for leaving a reply. Much appreciated. :)
Anonymous
13th Apr 2013 1:16am
Lost me dude....I found this.....flat.
13th Apr 2013 1:19am
