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Nothing lasts forever
We've loved and laughed
You used to fight on my behalf.
Kissing in the mornings
Making love in the evenings.
Romance wasn't your strong suit
No matter what you were still cute.
Now the days are lonely
Everything feels so phony.
Loving words go unspoken
Our wedding vows have been broken.
You used to fight on my behalf.
Kissing in the mornings
Making love in the evenings.
Romance wasn't your strong suit
No matter what you were still cute.
Now the days are lonely
Everything feels so phony.
Loving words go unspoken
Our wedding vows have been broken.
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Re: Nothing lasts forever
2nd Apr 2013 6:47am
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2nd Apr 2013 11:51am
Re: Nothing lasts forever
Anonymous
2nd Apr 2013 1:34pm
I'm feeling this..
Good way to express the unfortunate
Good way to express the unfortunate
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re: Re: Nothing lasts forever
2nd Apr 2013 2:11pm
Re: Nothing lasts forever
2nd Apr 2013 6:28pm
This is a sad poem to read, yet so well written Tommie. The lines that stood out to me are:
"You used to fight on my behalf"
It takes the reader back in time to before these events.
"Everything feels so phony / Loving words go unspoken"
The first line reminds me of the truth that love is an action, not just mere words, but the second really hits home when the reader realizes that not even the words exist anymore.
"You used to fight on my behalf"
It takes the reader back in time to before these events.
"Everything feels so phony / Loving words go unspoken"
The first line reminds me of the truth that love is an action, not just mere words, but the second really hits home when the reader realizes that not even the words exist anymore.
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re: Re: Nothing lasts forever
2nd Apr 2013 8:42pm
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2nd Apr 2013 11:07pm
I couldn't agree more, vows of love that are broken are the greatest tragedy.
Anytime Tommie ;)
Anytime Tommie ;)
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2nd Apr 2013 11:29pm
I believe it can make a person stronger as well...guarded, but take no shit kinda strong..:)
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2nd Apr 2013 11:32pm
Definitely, there is a positive side to everything. I was in a relationship that ended with me finding out about her cheating and to date that is the most pain I've felt but through that experience I was changed for the better. I became so much stronger. Now I wouldn't change what happened if I could.
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2nd Apr 2013 11:39pm
Funny how it works that way!Reminds me of a song
Pain Without Love by Three Days Grace
I know exactly what you went through and how you felt...glad you overcame it!! :)
Pain Without Love by Three Days Grace
I know exactly what you went through and how you felt...glad you overcame it!! :)
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3rd Apr 2013 00:22am
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3rd Apr 2013 00:27am
Hehehee, thank you...you're a wonderful writer as well..
Now I must play that song...otherwise it will be stuck in my head all night! :-)
Now I must play that song...otherwise it will be stuck in my head all night! :-)
Re: Nothing lasts forever
3rd Apr 2013 00:54am
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3rd Apr 2013 1:10am