Bullet-Holes

I dont know if you notice the shape of the poem itself, let's see if you can tell me what it looks like. (Yes, it was on purpose. :P) Please comment and critique, I wuv it! :D ~Jade

The shape itself is very crafty and speaks of your attitude as well...I guess its like some song notes...a vertical wave...very well written dear:-)

Thanks so much, well, I'd like to think this poem and it's shape speaks of my attitude, so thanks. ^_^ Hahaha, it is a short little piece but I love it. Thanks again. :)

The shape is a gun, if you haven't noticed, lol. Yeah, it's awesome.

i'm not keen on poems like this. single word lines creating a pic. but...there's always someone's but isn't there, i like it.

in fact i like it very much. feels punchy.
gives a feeling that something has to be done to show who ever it is the poem is aimed at that they're ignoring how you feel. so it gets a message across. the weapon is almost there ;)

thanks for the read jade.

You're very, very welcome, Billy? Yeah, I'd like to think my point comes across, I dont really do lovey dovey stuff, I'm not the average mushy love type of teen but hey, we've all got standards right? Lol, thanks for reading, glad you liked it. :)

i could never imagine poetry with just one type, style, or format. how boring would that be. :(

Oh my, what Apocalyptic mayhem would ensue!! I would explode if I didn't have the will to say 'Fuck off!' in my poetry. Most of my poetry is dark, this is probably the 'lightest' poem I have ever written, lol. See for yourself.

It happens....Unfortunately.

I did see the gun in the structure of your poem even before I read your comment on it.

I'm no longer surprise at your artistic craftiness with words.

Thanks for noticing. ^_^ And complimenting, reading, and commenting. :)

because they would already know ;)
Great artistic talent used here, props jade (gun structure is unique, impressively added a level of depth to this... showing the extent of the gravity of your feelings in light of your emotions)

Thanks, glad you felt the depth of this piece. The structure adds a sort of underlying POW! to it that I LOVE, lol. Thanks again. :)

HOT DAMN!!!!!!!!!!! I love this. Excellent work.

Hahaha, thanks so much. ^_^

Very well crafted. :)

I adore this, I know EXACTLY how you feel. Keep it up. x)