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Released From The Ashes
A smoke filled room
where my sins stain the walls
here loneliness abounds
regrets eat a hole in my soul
littering my mind
painfully I crash
agaist the breakers of my heart
feelings are alien to me
as if some strange tree
has sprouted and taken root within my being
tendrils of hope
creep in my smokey dungeon
I pace amongst the ashes of my past
my inner child burned huddled
lost among the dark shadows
in the corner cold and afraid
I lost the key to let her out long ago
amongst the debri of hate that engulfed me
slowly I unlock the door and tenderly embrace her
She is me, I am her
still shaken but alive
i'm taking hold of hope
slowly I turn and look
with eyes so attuned to the dark
at a bright future that causes my eyes to tear
no longer will I be trapped
in the nether land of rage
and self hate.
where my sins stain the walls
here loneliness abounds
regrets eat a hole in my soul
littering my mind
painfully I crash
agaist the breakers of my heart
feelings are alien to me
as if some strange tree
has sprouted and taken root within my being
tendrils of hope
creep in my smokey dungeon
I pace amongst the ashes of my past
my inner child burned huddled
lost among the dark shadows
in the corner cold and afraid
I lost the key to let her out long ago
amongst the debri of hate that engulfed me
slowly I unlock the door and tenderly embrace her
She is me, I am her
still shaken but alive
i'm taking hold of hope
slowly I turn and look
with eyes so attuned to the dark
at a bright future that causes my eyes to tear
no longer will I be trapped
in the nether land of rage
and self hate.
Written by
crimsin
(Unveiling)
Published 30th Mar 2013
| Edited 31st Mar 2013
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Re: Nether Land
Anonymous
30th Mar 2013 8:27pm
Wonderfully written poem.
Great write and good read.
You have great talent.
k
Great write and good read.
You have great talent.
k
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30th Mar 2013 8:34pm
Re: Nether Land
Anonymous
30th Mar 2013 9:25pm
release poem crim
nice write
strider
nice write
strider
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re: Re: Nether Land
31st Mar 2013 4:46am
Re: Nether Land
30th Mar 2013 9:50pm
my inner child burned huddled
lost among the dark shadows
in the corner cold and afraid
slowly I turn and look
with eyes so attuned to the dark
at a bright future that causes my eyes to tear
Great talent indeed,
I felt with this piece.
Much enjoyed.
lost among the dark shadows
in the corner cold and afraid
slowly I turn and look
with eyes so attuned to the dark
at a bright future that causes my eyes to tear
Great talent indeed,
I felt with this piece.
Much enjoyed.
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31st Mar 2013 4:47am
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30th Mar 2013 10:09pm
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Re: Released From The Ashes
Anonymous
31st Mar 2013 9:19am
Glad to read such a positive and hope filled end to this one, sadly beautiful throughout. I love the short, powerful stanzas..so well done that they could each stand alone as juicy little writes. A great write. My fav. part is
tendrils of hope
creep in my smokey dungeon
I pace amongst the ashes of my past
^^^^that's awesome but I love it all. peace n love
tendrils of hope
creep in my smokey dungeon
I pace amongst the ashes of my past
^^^^that's awesome but I love it all. peace n love
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Re: Released From The Ashes
31st Mar 2013 8:20pm
A very wonderful write laden with its sadness...
And then there's the eye's ...looking toward forward motion, Beautiful!!!
And then there's the eye's ...looking toward forward motion, Beautiful!!!
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re: Re: Released From The Ashes
24th Sep 2013 4:06pm
thank you Theo you positive outlook always puts a smile on my face.. peace Brenda