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Whisky morning
Had me a whisky
In the morning
And a bedtime
Afternoon
It was early
When the stars
Came out
They was a blinking
And a winking, and
Some of them were
Screaming
“Hey man, get out the way”!
“Look out”!
Took me a soupy
Noodle bath, getting
Laughed at by the pipes
And the lights were
Off by 9pm again
So now I’m walking
Down the street
And the city’s got a sweet
Way of swaying with
You like a friend
In the morning
And a bedtime
Afternoon
It was early
When the stars
Came out
They was a blinking
And a winking, and
Some of them were
Screaming
“Hey man, get out the way”!
“Look out”!
Took me a soupy
Noodle bath, getting
Laughed at by the pipes
And the lights were
Off by 9pm again
So now I’m walking
Down the street
And the city’s got a sweet
Way of swaying with
You like a friend
Published 24th Mar 2013
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26th Mar 2013 10:53pm
Now this is unique!
Somehow, each and every time I read this piece, it just feels as if it should be set to music--ummm, not exactly certain as to the particular style.
This is an unusually crafted piece....to be experienced to its fullest when read aloud! The whole idea of someone so easily overcome by only a single shot of whiskey...how the thought patterns are affected...creatively presented.
"...Took me a soupy/noodle bath,getting/laughed at by the pipes...." These lines are so clever...light-hearted...vividly descriptive! (caused me to smile!)
I have enjoyed re-reading this particular poem! Thank you for sharing.
Sioch`ain leat,
Enchantress
Somehow, each and every time I read this piece, it just feels as if it should be set to music--ummm, not exactly certain as to the particular style.
This is an unusually crafted piece....to be experienced to its fullest when read aloud! The whole idea of someone so easily overcome by only a single shot of whiskey...how the thought patterns are affected...creatively presented.
"...Took me a soupy/noodle bath,getting/laughed at by the pipes...." These lines are so clever...light-hearted...vividly descriptive! (caused me to smile!)
I have enjoyed re-reading this particular poem! Thank you for sharing.
Sioch`ain leat,
Enchantress
2nd Apr 2013 1:22am
