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Come undone
Hold my nerve till you walk on by
So unimpressed to keep my image
But as soon as you blink in my direction
I come undone
My face messes up, like a happy squirrel
I'm not scared to talk to you I just don't want to
Lieing is so easy
I'm afraid if i ever hurt you your revenge would be so sweet
I'm scum, yes i know how you see me
But with one blink
I come undone
So unimpressed to keep my image
But as soon as you blink in my direction
I come undone
My face messes up, like a happy squirrel
I'm not scared to talk to you I just don't want to
Lieing is so easy
I'm afraid if i ever hurt you your revenge would be so sweet
I'm scum, yes i know how you see me
But with one blink
I come undone
Published 23rd Sep 2010
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24th Sep 2010 11:24am
28th Oct 2010 3:44am
Anonymous
27th Oct 2010 4:55pm
Hi Crow!
I liked reading this poem!
It has a simple message that everybody at least felt once in his/her life, so it is easy to 'feel' your words. I agree with Opheliac, 'with one blink I come undone' is the masterline and is just precious! I also cannot stop wondering how a happy squirrel looks like ... hehehe =) Keep up the good work!
I liked reading this poem!
It has a simple message that everybody at least felt once in his/her life, so it is easy to 'feel' your words. I agree with Opheliac, 'with one blink I come undone' is the masterline and is just precious! I also cannot stop wondering how a happy squirrel looks like ... hehehe =) Keep up the good work!
28th Oct 2010 3:47am
Hi Melissa!
Thank you for reading my poem i'm glad you like my work and the line
keep wondering about the squirrel's too;) lol
and i will thank you
