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Our goodbye, on the Northen Line.
For Robyn.
Your arms wrapped round me
Tighter then rope
Time slowed
Never let go,
A kiss I missed
A hand to bold to hold
These chances I missed
Will never grow old,
Because your denial is the reason I’ll never find a girl sweeter then you,
And all the music of The underground
Which I’ll never let go
Will cry forever of;
A day almost missed
A Girl
A Boy
Whose lips long to meet
Our Goodbye on the Northern Line
Was just the start.
Your arms wrapped round me
Tighter then rope
Time slowed
Never let go,
A kiss I missed
A hand to bold to hold
These chances I missed
Will never grow old,
Because your denial is the reason I’ll never find a girl sweeter then you,
And all the music of The underground
Which I’ll never let go
Will cry forever of;
A day almost missed
A Girl
A Boy
Whose lips long to meet
Our Goodbye on the Northern Line
Was just the start.
Published 22nd Sep 2010
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Anonymous
22nd Sep 2010 8:43pm
A gorgeous poem, bittersweet and melancholy, but the structure could have done with some tightening up. The line beginning "because your denial..." was much too long, and I think you need to put a "you" after "cry forever of," but other than that the flow was perfect, the images clear and succinct, and the narrative lovely. :]
22nd Sep 2010 8:59pm
cheeeers :) and yeaa needs work sorta new to the whole writing poetry xo
4th Oct 2010 10:10pm
I loved this! so detailed without saying very much at all kinda of a read between the lines poem.... it touched my heart deeply! :)
