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Lost,
I can’t forget the fantasy I lived in,
whether it came true
I miss hoping for who I’d end with;
We don’t speak anymore
Unless you count the four
time’s we spoke in
the dream the night before,
it’s funny how high you feel
when you’re not even four inches
off the floor;
Stir crazy, Puzzled,
Confused, and Conflicted
Dazed in delusion, Spun out,
Contradicted,
Torn apart, Divided,
Lit up, Clear headed
but blinded,
Past, Present, and Future
opposing forces have collided,
and in collision,
I’m shattered
and scattered
after math of something
that doesn’t matter,
It never happened
so why am I not laughing
or why the laughter
isn’t coming faster
or why relief isn’t coming quicker,
downing on a bottle,
put me on the liquor,
A can and a paint brush
couldn’t paint me a better picture
For now.
I can’t forget the fantasy I lived in,
whether it came true
I miss hoping for who I’d end with;
We don’t speak anymore
Unless you count the four
time’s we spoke in
the dream the night before,
it’s funny how high you feel
when you’re not even four inches
off the floor;
Stir crazy, Puzzled,
Confused, and Conflicted
Dazed in delusion, Spun out,
Contradicted,
Torn apart, Divided,
Lit up, Clear headed
but blinded,
Past, Present, and Future
opposing forces have collided,
and in collision,
I’m shattered
and scattered
after math of something
that doesn’t matter,
It never happened
so why am I not laughing
or why the laughter
isn’t coming faster
or why relief isn’t coming quicker,
downing on a bottle,
put me on the liquor,
A can and a paint brush
couldn’t paint me a better picture
For now.
Published 21st Mar 2013
| Edited 12th Apr 2013
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21st Mar 2013 9:32pm
Sounds like you live in dreamland, make it happen maybe? Cheers, and liked the natural developement in this piece!
11th Apr 2013 5:35pm
12th Apr 2013 10:08pm
21st Apr 2013 2:44am
I figured that out of appreciation for being the first person to comment on my thread that I'd check out some of your poetry... I'm enjoying it so far :)
21st Apr 2013 2:58am
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13th Mar 2014 2:52pm
There's some nice subtle rhyme in here. I often think that continuous blocks of text like this makes the poem lose something, but here it has worked very well for you. There's some beautiful personal insight going on here. You do this well, and I hope you continue with this tone throughout your other poetic endeavors.
Thank you for the read.
Thank you for the read.
13th Mar 2014 4:40pm
Well thank you Missy...it is refreshing to hear feedback with genuine thought . My pleasure, I'm glad you enjoyed it
