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Cosmic wanderer
Orbiting in the midst of diverse constellations,
I discuss gravitational politics with Sirius.
Luminosity ratings are sky-rocketing
whilst black holes stretch out leisurely,
murmuring with catastrophic smiles
"Time is running out"
Wherever has the notion of celestial bliss abscond too,
as supernovas radiate the vast lacrimosa of heaven.
Black velvet skies once offered clemency,
but it seems dear Asteria has deemed penance,
and farther time forewarns of pendulum cracks.
Ghost stars take Dark's hand for comfort,
handing out residual heat-energy free.
The Shadows dominate light as Cimmerian Gods,
learned masters of stealth and cunning,
having ventured out from the universes
reclusive corners long before.
I revoke the followings of my faith in previous oracles;
expelled from the remains, that at a time, was revered as the Milky Way.
Roaming light years beyond the spectral nebula
I overhear the rumors of a rogue nullifying Hera
relaying the foretelling's of a nameless deity,
rising into the stature of a goddess in the new millennium.
Collaborated,
kourtnissixxx: stanza 2+4 :)
Scribbler: stanza 1+3
I discuss gravitational politics with Sirius.
Luminosity ratings are sky-rocketing
whilst black holes stretch out leisurely,
murmuring with catastrophic smiles
"Time is running out"
Wherever has the notion of celestial bliss abscond too,
as supernovas radiate the vast lacrimosa of heaven.
Black velvet skies once offered clemency,
but it seems dear Asteria has deemed penance,
and farther time forewarns of pendulum cracks.
Ghost stars take Dark's hand for comfort,
handing out residual heat-energy free.
The Shadows dominate light as Cimmerian Gods,
learned masters of stealth and cunning,
having ventured out from the universes
reclusive corners long before.
I revoke the followings of my faith in previous oracles;
expelled from the remains, that at a time, was revered as the Milky Way.
Roaming light years beyond the spectral nebula
I overhear the rumors of a rogue nullifying Hera
relaying the foretelling's of a nameless deity,
rising into the stature of a goddess in the new millennium.
Collaborated,
kourtnissixxx: stanza 2+4 :)
Scribbler: stanza 1+3
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Re: Cosmic wanderer
12th Mar 2013 7:29am
I had lots of fun writing with you scribbs ^_^ perhaps we'll do it again some time.
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re: Re: Cosmic wanderer
12th Mar 2013 7:43am
Re: Cosmic wanderer
12th Mar 2013 7:41am
"i revoke the followings of my faith in previous oracles"
me too this is my world!
put yourself in charge.
well done scibbs.
nicely done mam///////////
me too this is my world!
put yourself in charge.
well done scibbs.
nicely done mam///////////
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re: Re: Cosmic wanderer
12th Mar 2013 7:45am
Re: Cosmic wanderer
12th Mar 2013 7:47am
Re: Cosmic wanderer
Anonymous
12th Mar 2013 8:24am
THUMBS UP and hats off!!!
A big bravo to two grand ladies here on DUP!!!!
A big bravo to two grand ladies here on DUP!!!!
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re: Re: Cosmic wanderer
12th Mar 2013 9:11am
Re: Cosmic wanderer
12th Mar 2013 10:14am
Orbiting in the midst of diverse constellations love that line. Great Pen Scribs, nicely done.
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re: Re: Cosmic wanderer
12th Mar 2013 10:28am
Re: Cosmic wanderer
Anonymous
12th Mar 2013 5:50pm
Congrats ladies to a superb write. In particular I like the following lines:
Luminosity ratings are sky-rocketing
whilst black holes stretch out leisurely,
murmuring with catastrophic smiles
"Time is running out"
&
Ghost stars take Dark's hand for comfort,
handing out residual heat-energy free.
Wonderful work - enjoyed the read very much! :)
Carlene
Luminosity ratings are sky-rocketing
whilst black holes stretch out leisurely,
murmuring with catastrophic smiles
"Time is running out"
&
Ghost stars take Dark's hand for comfort,
handing out residual heat-energy free.
Wonderful work - enjoyed the read very much! :)
Carlene
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re: Re: Cosmic wanderer
12th Mar 2013 6:16pm
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12th Mar 2013 7:11pm
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12th Mar 2013 8:08pm
Re: Cosmic wanderer
Anonymous
12th Mar 2013 7:42pm
Incredibly penned. You two merged wonderfully together
! X&O
! X&O
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12th Mar 2013 8:08pm
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12th Mar 2013 10:16pm
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13th Mar 2013 6:06am
Re: Cosmic wanderer
13th Mar 2013 3:15am
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13th Mar 2013 6:08am
Re: Cosmic wanderer
13th Mar 2013 3:32am
ooo a collaborative piece!
I never would have guessed.
It is very fluent and consistent.
Some parts were a little difficult to understand mostly due to some of the vocab; they work well but readers who don't know space terms too well may get slightly confused?
Those are just my thoughts though.
Unique poem :)
I never would have guessed.
It is very fluent and consistent.
Some parts were a little difficult to understand mostly due to some of the vocab; they work well but readers who don't know space terms too well may get slightly confused?
Those are just my thoughts though.
Unique poem :)
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13th Mar 2013 6:09am
Re: Cosmic wanderer
Anonymous
2nd Apr 2013 2:15pm
Oh man!!! This is awesome ( I forgot my thesaurus )
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2nd Apr 2013 2:19pm