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Sick world (more than one)
eye for an eye
tooth for a tooth
the sick bastard raped her
now he'll hang at the noose
he feels no remorse
he gets pride from their pain
the upbeat attitude he has
boils their blood in their veins
they say its all over "You are done!"
he replys "You may have gotten me,
but im not the only one".
tooth for a tooth
the sick bastard raped her
now he'll hang at the noose
he feels no remorse
he gets pride from their pain
the upbeat attitude he has
boils their blood in their veins
they say its all over "You are done!"
he replys "You may have gotten me,
but im not the only one".
Published 14th Sep 2010
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14th Sep 2010 8:53pm
Very powerful for such a short piece. The little rhyme to it made it awesome. The thought of something so serious interlaced in a almost sing-song way makes it sinisterly the shiz. Lol, sorry, that's just my way of saying stuff. Very good job. :D
17th Sep 2010 2:22pm
19th Sep 2010 7:14am
For a poem so short it says a lot more than most poems do. Great insight and way of putting something too. But i wonder... where did the inspiration come from? Just wondering. And if i may, the line that says "boils their blood in their veins"? It might sound better if it read, "boils the blood in their veins" just a suggestion. You write better than i do tho.
