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While
While taking off my clothes I caught your scent,
still lingering on my skin.
While touching my skin I caught my breath,
still sensing you inside me.
While sensing you inside me I caught the train to nowhere land,
still travelling the journey of no return.
still lingering on my skin.
While touching my skin I caught my breath,
still sensing you inside me.
While sensing you inside me I caught the train to nowhere land,
still travelling the journey of no return.
Published 21st Feb 2013
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Anonymous
21st Feb 2013 8:28pm
An elegant write & enjoyable to read. In the last two lines I like the image of a one-way train going nowhere in particular. Makes one think & that is the beauty of poetry. Nicely done, Iris. :)
21st Feb 2013 8:38pm
Thank you so much for your kind words, Carlene ... Please tell me if I make mistakes, I would appreciate that!
Anonymous
23rd Feb 2013 1:12am
You're welcome, Iris. Sure, if anything jumps off the page at me I'll mention it. And please do the same for me! :)
3rd Jul 2013 4:58am
Sounds like a pretty nice lil trip! Lucky stiff must've left quite an impression on you lol excellent ink my friend :)
19th Jul 2013 10:39pm
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Anonymous
3rd Dec 2013 7:43am
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3rd Dec 2013 7:27pm
Thanks Ellipse,
for your kind comment!
But are you sure
that it was meant for this poem?
for your kind comment!
But are you sure
that it was meant for this poem?
Anonymous
4th Dec 2013 5:39pm
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