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The Fence: Living Dreams
A blanket tied around his neck,
Dad's belt and Mom's kitchen utensils,
Pants with his underwear on the outside,
And his favorite Batman shirt.
He's a hero, fighting fiction
This is his dream and reality
As only a child's imagination can.
With time he'll grow further away.
Age will pull him apart from heroes,
He'll grow up and stop believing.
But until then, he's going to go on
Defiling the Joker and breaking Bane's back
He'll invent his own martial arts
Generate epic sound-effects
When done, ride off into the kitchen
For every superhero needs to eat
Dad's belt and Mom's kitchen utensils,
Pants with his underwear on the outside,
And his favorite Batman shirt.
He's a hero, fighting fiction
This is his dream and reality
As only a child's imagination can.
With time he'll grow further away.
Age will pull him apart from heroes,
He'll grow up and stop believing.
But until then, he's going to go on
Defiling the Joker and breaking Bane's back
He'll invent his own martial arts
Generate epic sound-effects
When done, ride off into the kitchen
For every superhero needs to eat
Published 19th Feb 2013
| Edited 24th Feb 2013
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19th Feb 2013 9:04pm
Made me smile, best upbeat poem I've read yet.
Memories, memories.
He's a hero, fighting the imaginary
This is his dream and reality
As only a child's imagination can.
With time he'll grow further away.
Imagination is key, I hope never to lose mine.
Wonderful poem.
Memories, memories.
He's a hero, fighting the imaginary
This is his dream and reality
As only a child's imagination can.
With time he'll grow further away.
Imagination is key, I hope never to lose mine.
Wonderful poem.
20th Feb 2013 6:34pm
Very well written with terrific details in the first stanza.
My only very minor quibble goes to a specific word choice in the second stanza. You do such a great job "showing not telling" in that first stanza that I think you could come up with a sexier word (s) for imaginary in the first line of the second stanza especially since you use imagination in the third line.
Overall, a strong and enjoyable piece.
My only very minor quibble goes to a specific word choice in the second stanza. You do such a great job "showing not telling" in that first stanza that I think you could come up with a sexier word (s) for imaginary in the first line of the second stanza especially since you use imagination in the third line.
Overall, a strong and enjoyable piece.
24th Feb 2013 7:14am
I came up with a different word "Fighting the imaginary". I didn't like repeating myself either but couldn't come up with something when writting it. After some thought though I did figure out a better word.
Anonymous
24th Feb 2013 3:20pm
Very enjoyable!
