Blackhole some

An interesting introspective piece LB :) I often wonder about the poets black and gray. It's a fine line. Very much like the reference to the ouroborus in your poems lately. Not that it's relevant by one of my favourite necklaces is that of the curling snake. Anyways, I much enjoyed pondering over this piece, and I'm sure I'll come back to it for another read. :)

Peace, Indie

Thank you indie.
This was a weird thing. Pretty much started by someone askimg me to hear a poem,.and it was the most generic broad type thing, that i couldnt really say anything but, what is that "black" like? Or that "hole".
So really just a poem about poetry, ehhhh

ah, you're never generic, LB, there is a certain ambiguity in some of your work, but it's never boring. I like this interesting little poem on poetry. x)

This was complex but good. I've read it three times and I think I see where you're going with this. If I'm right. So true 1 light xoxox

Thank ya m'dear...and im sure you are spot on with your take of it

LB

I have read this three times, and it is still sitting fine with me.

Thoroughly enjoyed it Hun :)

Ha, thanks Maggie
and glad to hear it...like i said to indie, a bit of an thing here, but i spent way more time than i should have, so glad that it worked for ya

deeply lightbaron and so

strider

Thanks strider

Nice how it seems to synthesize early romantic poetry with more modern stylistic and formatting choices, and also seems to be in part an exploration of this dialectic. Though the last line leaves us in the murky space in between, the poem does seem to privilege the former a little more than the latter. Consider working more with the opposition between florid language and common speech without value judgements toward them, especially if seeking to also express a metaphysical truth that is ultimately incompatible with either.

Valis,
Howdy, cheers and thank you...appreciate that thoughtful comment, and it has given me some good chewing to do.
I certainly agree with the judgemental aspect, that voicel distracts and makes it lose something.
Again, thank ya very much..hope to see ya around

Yep...

I would lose the last stanza as well. Another thing that actually came up this time is

"initiated alphabet"

Tell me exactly what you were seeing when you wrote that please ?

Hey thanks Maggie.
K, last stanza is in one second whacked.

The iniated alphabet..is the opening of the alphabet..the letter A...like an arabesque, a particiularly shaped opening
same shape as lady parts, referred to the next line..

No good? or ok, u think?

Not needed really in that context. I had a feeling that was what you were getting at, but... I know ballet Hun. You need to consider those who might not, and show them what you are seeing so they can relate. -

"are they arabesques;
as holy of an opening
as an initiated alphabet
or the sublime
of finely folded flesh?"

Something along these lines gives a clearer picture to what you are seeing in my opinion.

are they arabesques;
as holy as alphabet
foldings, subtle sweeps
of figures, of flesh ?