The Hole

nice concept :)
nicer poem.

Thanks much 13, glad that you liked.

Uley

Beautifully written. What does it mean? LOL. I'm kinda slow sometimes, when it comes to understanding, well um, things I don't understand. I would love to understand this.

Let's call it a dark-eyed child sort of tale, for here Shaunda. Nothing to do with me really, though it surely isn't fiction either.

Feel free to ask me offline, that doesn't really cover it--but I tend not to explain much when I go this route. Sometimes, I like to hear what others see/feel about these surreal bits that I may not have intended. No extra points for being right or wrong, but the general gist...

So no, you are not slow. It is deliberately written "open." I only know what I meant when I wrote it.

Thanks much for the read.

Uley

wow. I had no idea people wrote in this fashion. I always thought I was the only one who didn't understand others poems. haha makes me feel better about my mental abilities. I'll read it over with an OPEN mind. Thanks

Actually, I kind of started calling it heavy camouflage, when the writing was actually about myself. For a while, I had near stopped writing poetry altogether (as in years), but just sort of changed it up. Now it has become something like a natural habitat.  
 
Thanks for coming back to give it another shot Shaunda.
 
Uley

Thanks Uley....nice write.

Strider

Thanks much Strider.

Uley

I really liked this poem, Uley!
It seems to peal itself off until there are only few words left. I have enjoyed reading this very much!

Thank you very much Mourgana, I am glad that you enjoyed this.

Uley

My interpretation is as dark as your poem.  I see a tragic death of a young child here.

I like this part:

"Until life became
another object of herself,
slipping upon the darkness
and into the deep
dark wonder of the below"

But this line that follows doesn't flow structurally.. maybe I'm reading it wrong.

"may rise o'er and above her "

Actually, not far from what I had intended to write about at all Atakti. What is overwhelming is not grief per se, at least not in sense of losing her child. The sense of loss, in what I was reaching for with this (again, not made clearly) was prior to the death itself.

Spelling it out, there are times when a child becomes something other than a productive member of society. We often blame parents, and in certain cases that may be entirely true. There are also many several times where a parent has reached out for help once a child has gone out of control, and pretty much been left wanting.

When events become tragic (whether the media opts to cover the issue or not)--the parent, regardless of what they did or did not try to do, often becomes the object of the public's outrage; often followed with a slue of, more often than not, terrible advice (after the fact) of what they would have done if it were their kid. If you do not work closely with these individuals (troubled adolescents and teens)--you never really see it. An out of control child is not as rare as it would be made to seem, though what follows is often not horrendous enough for the major media to bother with...

With this, the mother involved is already grieving the loss, while the child may still be very much alive--becoming something other. Trying to rescue the perceived beauty of her child (when they were a good little boy or girl) There can be any of number of reasons this happens, but as long as we are willing to let it rest on the idea that it was all merely about inadequate parenting, her and the child will likely not be the only ones that end up in "the hole"... and so, around and round it goes.

That is what this is about.

Thanks for reading Atakti, and apologies for the obscurity. As I said earlier, I like to get other folks impressions from it. Being apt to what I meant when written, just not a big deal.

You have a good one.

Uley  

It's made me think, and go over it a few times.  It's in my reading list, to review again in the future.  Much depth here, Uley, and your comments have helped, but I still feel as if I'm peering into an abyss.

Heh-he, is okay Atakti. Kind of an acquired taste anyways.
 
Uley

Hole indeed...

Knowing the provocation behind this does help enlighten a bit.

and "open" indeed as well...

I have read this several times, and I still am left wondering. :)

That's because you cheated, and we talked about it (moreso than could ever be covered here) afterwards ;).

Still wondering is not a bad thing for something like this--thinking is part of the point really.

Thanks for reading Hon ;)

Uley