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And finally explode into a thousand fragments of stars
and it was as we wished:
slowly, thoroughly
and with infinite gentleness.
It was like slipping into a cloud,
soak in a warm water lake,
floating in the pink sky at dawn,
pulsate in the same celestial body
She finally broke down
and indulged in tears
in my arms.
We were so intertwined
for a while, in silence,
trying to delete
the coldness, emptiness and abandonment
that plagued both.
I do not remember if my mouth sought her
or was her mouth sought mine;
perhaps it was something of both.
We found ourselves, unrealistically,
to make love
and it was as we wished:
slowly, thoroughly
and with infinite gentleness.
It was like slipping into a cloud,
soak in a warm water lake,
floating in the pink sky at dawn,
pulsate in the same celestial body,
as it passes by the blood and life,
strangers to the sad winter of death
and finally explode
into a thousand fragments of stars,
into deep space and infinite
of her desperate eyes of a child.
slowly, thoroughly
and with infinite gentleness.
It was like slipping into a cloud,
soak in a warm water lake,
floating in the pink sky at dawn,
pulsate in the same celestial body
She finally broke down
and indulged in tears
in my arms.
We were so intertwined
for a while, in silence,
trying to delete
the coldness, emptiness and abandonment
that plagued both.
I do not remember if my mouth sought her
or was her mouth sought mine;
perhaps it was something of both.
We found ourselves, unrealistically,
to make love
and it was as we wished:
slowly, thoroughly
and with infinite gentleness.
It was like slipping into a cloud,
soak in a warm water lake,
floating in the pink sky at dawn,
pulsate in the same celestial body,
as it passes by the blood and life,
strangers to the sad winter of death
and finally explode
into a thousand fragments of stars,
into deep space and infinite
of her desperate eyes of a child.
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Re: And finally explode into a thousand fragments of stars
19th Jan 2013 11:12pm
It's good to see posting again. Very romantic piece you have here, it's a nice switch from the lustful stanzas I was used to.
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re: Re: And finally explode into a thousand fragments of stars
20th Jan 2013 9:34pm
Thanks, I'm glad you like it.
We are damned romantic or romantic damned.
As you better prefer ;)
A kiss
Luca
We are damned romantic or romantic damned.
As you better prefer ;)
A kiss
Luca
Re: And finally explode into a thousand fragments of stars
Wow. That was my reaction for 3 continuous reads. I agree with Kourtnisi, nice change from your usual writing themes!
Thank you.
Thank you.
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re: Re: And finally explode into a thousand fragments of stars
20th Jan 2013 9:41pm
You're too good to me, as always.
Although I often write dark things,
actually, I'm a terribly sweet and romantic.
So say my lovers (when I have some).
Thanx a lot
Luca xxx
Although I often write dark things,
actually, I'm a terribly sweet and romantic.
So say my lovers (when I have some).
Thanx a lot
Luca xxx
Re: And finally explode into a thousand fragments of stars
20th Jan 2013 00:23am
very sweet & well said, mr.Luca
ain't seen ye for awhile now...
wel
comeback fr'om wherever
ain't seen ye for awhile now...
wel
comeback fr'om wherever
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re: Re: And finally explode into a thousand fragments of stars
20th Jan 2013 9:45pm
Dear maestro, I'm glad you like it.
I write on DUP
when I get the inspiration.
It's not often I am not a prolific poet.
Thank you very much
a hug
Luca
I write on DUP
when I get the inspiration.
It's not often I am not a prolific poet.
Thank you very much
a hug
Luca
Re: And finally explode into a thousand fragments of stars
Anonymous
20th Jan 2013 3:29am
I loved it. The poem and the image is my dream of eternal love....dying together while having orgasms.....You have written this so well is is a soothing poem with a punch. Bravo.
Terrific
A kiss
Kitty
Terrific
A kiss
Kitty
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re: Re: And finally explode into a thousand fragments of stars
20th Jan 2013 9:51pm
As always you grasp the most intimate part of my thoughts.
It may be because we feel the things of the heart, in the same way?
I will dream of exploding with you tonight ;)
A deep kiss, my love.
Luca
It may be because we feel the things of the heart, in the same way?
I will dream of exploding with you tonight ;)
A deep kiss, my love.
Luca
Re: And finally explode into a thousand fragments of stars
20th Jan 2013 5:21am
I have to say WOW too! A most excellent, touching, passionate, sad, wonderful poem!
Have missed you, my friend.
Have missed you, my friend.
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re: Re: And finally explode into a thousand fragments of stars
20th Jan 2013 9:55pm
Thank you very much for reading
thank you very much for your support
I'm glad you like it
I wrote it for sweet people
like you
a kiss
Luca
thank you very much for your support
I'm glad you like it
I wrote it for sweet people
like you
a kiss
Luca
Re: And finally explode into a thousand fragments of stars
20th Jan 2013 5:20pm
Yay! one of my favorite poets is back! I love this poem, for it's so passionate and full of outstanding imagery.
I absolutely love the lines:
"soak in a warm water lake,
floating in the pink sky at dawn,
pulsate in the same celestial body"
I can literally feel myself swimming in a lake during late spring and early summer, I see myself growing wings and flying into the early morning sun, all at the same time being one with my future soulmate. Thank you so much for this fantastic piece.
-Loki
I absolutely love the lines:
"soak in a warm water lake,
floating in the pink sky at dawn,
pulsate in the same celestial body"
I can literally feel myself swimming in a lake during late spring and early summer, I see myself growing wings and flying into the early morning sun, all at the same time being one with my future soulmate. Thank you so much for this fantastic piece.
-Loki
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re: Re: And finally explode into a thousand fragments of stars
20th Jan 2013 10:03pm
You're right: it is a sweet atmosphere of spring.
It is a privilege for me that you have shared my visions.
You must be a wonderful person and sensitive.
Your soulmate will be a lucky person.
a kiss
Luca
It is a privilege for me that you have shared my visions.
You must be a wonderful person and sensitive.
Your soulmate will be a lucky person.
a kiss
Luca
Re: And finally explode into a thousand fragments of stars
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20th Jan 2013 7:52pm
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re: Re: And finally explode into a thousand fragments of stars
20th Jan 2013 10:15pm
She was sad
(happens a lot lately, are difficult times)
and he found a way to comfort her.
love can do everything.
In this case it was sweet, slow and deep.
Thank you for your nice comment.
a hug
Luca
(happens a lot lately, are difficult times)
and he found a way to comfort her.
love can do everything.
In this case it was sweet, slow and deep.
Thank you for your nice comment.
a hug
Luca
Re: And finally explode into a thousand fragments of stars
Anonymous
- Edited 20th Jan 2013 11:28pm
20th Jan 2013 11:27pm
Flowing into flowing....
What a cool read! Much enjoyed, L D C :-)
May I ask you....?
In this line, is " to make love" written as intended? Cos I can't quite see how it fits grammatically....?
*We found ourselves, unrealistically,
to make love
Thanks for sharing and pen on, poet!
Cheers
Tidespotter
Ps. Love the title. It almost belies the tone of the poem....
What a cool read! Much enjoyed, L D C :-)
May I ask you....?
In this line, is " to make love" written as intended? Cos I can't quite see how it fits grammatically....?
*We found ourselves, unrealistically,
to make love
Thanks for sharing and pen on, poet!
Cheers
Tidespotter
Ps. Love the title. It almost belies the tone of the poem....
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re: Re: And finally explode into a thousand fragments of stars
24th Feb 2013 2:36am
You are probably right: I'll try to correct.
Thanks for reading and for your nice comment.
Thanks for reading and for your nice comment.
Re: And finally explode into a thousand fragments of stars
Anonymous
24th Feb 2013 2:24am
:) A Masterpiece!
Impressive Ink!
Impressive Ink!
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re: Re: And finally explode into a thousand fragments of stars
24th Feb 2013 2:42am
Wow :D
You are very kind.
You encourage me to continue.
Thank you for reading and for your sweet comment.
You are very kind.
You encourage me to continue.
Thank you for reading and for your sweet comment.