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Chasing death
Love sets you free?
it's the solitude
that drives me to empty;
Yet I focus not on you
but on the last light,
with a firm belief
in mendacity and disrepair
as gravity takes us all away
This is the only freedom I know
it's the solitude
that drives me to empty;
Yet I focus not on you
but on the last light,
with a firm belief
in mendacity and disrepair
as gravity takes us all away
This is the only freedom I know
Published 18th Jan 2013
| Edited 20th Jan 2013
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18th Jan 2013 3:50pm
I like the contrast between light and "mendacity and disrepair".
Good to see you posting again, Steven.
:)
Good to see you posting again, Steven.
:)
18th Jan 2013 5:59pm
20th Jan 2013 3:40pm
This is interesting tejean, but I am inclined to think it actually needs to be fleshed out a tad more.
Enjoyed the read Hun :)
Enjoyed the read Hun :)
20th Jan 2013 9:01pm
20th Jan 2013 8:33pm
20th Jan 2013 9:02pm
Definitely not a skeletal poem..
I think what you say here is just enough to wet the palate
but then; part of the reason I love short (no.. great and well laid down short) pieces
is because I adore the feeling of being left a little hungry.
Sometimes too much is too heavy.
Perfect.
(Even without the addition of the singular first line)
I think what you say here is just enough to wet the palate
but then; part of the reason I love short (no.. great and well laid down short) pieces
is because I adore the feeling of being left a little hungry.
Sometimes too much is too heavy.
Perfect.
(Even without the addition of the singular first line)
22nd Jan 2013 8:14am
