downpour

The final dialogue in brackets makes a beautiful ending to this dark and yet seren poem. Your ability to convey beauty in death is terrifying; I just hope no-one on the edge reads this haha. Well-written and constructed piece, so quietly and lushly romantic, especially considering its subject matter.

thanks man i waasnt sure about putting the last paragraph/stanza in but went with it.. glad you like it

This poem could use some to much effect.

poet nazi worried about punctuation? well there's a question mark for ya.. (read between the lines honey and don't be so god damned anal retentive)

i admire your courage as it is described in the stunning poem. you fear not death but you can see it's beauty regardless of what it may bring!

we're all headed there regardless like we're all in life regardless of what we may have chosen had we been asked beforehand.. so it can't be any worse than life.. there is no hell.. we're already experiencing that in the here and now

Jack said it perfectly with "lushly romantic". Through the ideals in death and the last stanza, too; goes with it perfectly. Gorgeous is all over this one.

aw ty for the read and compliments.. cheers!

I like that you've called this downpoar...like crashing down and cleansing both at the same time. There's something amazing about storms...the way the air builds up thick and heavy right before they start, and all that roar and grinding of earth plates and rain clears the air completely...

i like right before it rain and it cools down (esp here since its usually so hot) and you know its almost there.. in the poem i talk about the calm AFTER the storm though.. after the storms here its usually hotter than before.. all that fucking humidity.. dont you think crashing down is cleansing like destruction leads to good in the end.. like it needed to happen.. like ive had visions of the void but also complete chaos.. both are complete.. and i think they follow after each other.. and they just need to come about.. like the big bang or whatever in the beginning was building up and inevitable.. necessary.. building up and inevitable like certain 4 words :)

my how far you've come.. adore this piece! I can not wait to see more from you mr alchemist. amazing. <3

aw thx hun.. gotta stay diverse.. can't talk about hating God and fucking people up with hammers all the time heh.. plenty more to come.. cheers!

This is an excellent work. I absolutely loved it! You're an amazing writer.  :)

thanks for the generous compliment.