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The world replied
The time that passed between the moments
Of when you looked in my direction
But I again glanced away unseen
Your words whispered in the late of night
While I all knowing waited, silent and observing
Until once again I see you return
Across my horizon
Of when you looked in my direction
But I again glanced away unseen
Your words whispered in the late of night
While I all knowing waited, silent and observing
Until once again I see you return
Across my horizon
Published 12th Jan 2013
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13th Jan 2013 1:15am
I make it a habit not to use two of the same words in a sentence "time" and "moments", and the poem is a bit confusing, it's like the opposite attraction of magnets, you want to be noticed and then you don't out of fear? but their words are OK, just trying to understand.
13th Jan 2013 1:38am
it is a little confusing I know but it was meant to just be a quick little scribe of opposing points of view in reply to a friends work
Anonymous
9th Feb 2013 7:14am
Did so enjoy reading this.
Keep all up and pen on, poet!
Thanks for sharing :-)
Cheers
Tidespotter
Ps. Love that unusual technique of the title not appearing anywhere in the poem.
Songwriter Don McLean was famed for this cool thing.
Great stuff!
:-)
Keep all up and pen on, poet!
Thanks for sharing :-)
Cheers
Tidespotter
Ps. Love that unusual technique of the title not appearing anywhere in the poem.
Songwriter Don McLean was famed for this cool thing.
Great stuff!
:-)
