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Touching the Tabernacle
These thoughts are draining,
Elements that swirl around the vortex
In a maelstrom that only knows successions
Of Use,
Discard,
And treatment.
These realizations wash over me
Deterging away the guilt and blame,
Expiation of my hands,
Desperately trying to seek an absolution,
Grasping at catharsis that is found
Only to be lost too easily to the basin.
The pipes plug too often
In this house,
And the water sits polluted
For me to take a solid look
At the things that are never concrete.
Elements that swirl around the vortex
In a maelstrom that only knows successions
Of Use,
Discard,
And treatment.
These realizations wash over me
Deterging away the guilt and blame,
Expiation of my hands,
Desperately trying to seek an absolution,
Grasping at catharsis that is found
Only to be lost too easily to the basin.
The pipes plug too often
In this house,
And the water sits polluted
For me to take a solid look
At the things that are never concrete.
Published 29th Dec 2012
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29th Dec 2012 8:53pm
30th Dec 2012 7:30am
thank you! i really appreciate that.
any critiques? please? other than grammatical and spelling... i'm dying for something here.
any critiques? please? other than grammatical and spelling... i'm dying for something here.
It seems obvious that you do spend a great deal of time "in, with, and under" these thoughts. (A little Lutheran Communion reference from my somewhat younger days..sorry...though it does seem to fit with you being in, with, and under these draining thoughts.) You've certainly thought up excellent ways of voicing and wording these thoughts, and you wield the power of the silences between the words expertly. "Deterging away"..."Deterging"...wow, I can just smell the fresh lemon scent, a thourough cleaning.
I love how at the end you bring in the physical reference of the pipes that plug up too often. One of those "Wake up and look around" moments, perfectly done.
I love how at the end you bring in the physical reference of the pipes that plug up too often. One of those "Wake up and look around" moments, perfectly done.
2nd Jan 2013 9:21pm
this is actually in respect to "cleanliness is next to godliness"
there is a passage in which it is loosely stated that none that are defiled shall touch the tabernacle.
this respectively i've taken and turned it into a representation of knowing that the things i've done have been consciously done, knowing that it is unclean, and although the revelations wash over me, trying to clean me the knowledge of what im capable of is drowning, consuming, to the point where everything that is touched afterwards is tainted as well.
even despite this, who is it to decide what is right and what is wrong. these acts mixed in with daily epiphanies muddle the lines, and thus the acts themselves, wrong doings are never "concrete"
there is a passage in which it is loosely stated that none that are defiled shall touch the tabernacle.
this respectively i've taken and turned it into a representation of knowing that the things i've done have been consciously done, knowing that it is unclean, and although the revelations wash over me, trying to clean me the knowledge of what im capable of is drowning, consuming, to the point where everything that is touched afterwards is tainted as well.
even despite this, who is it to decide what is right and what is wrong. these acts mixed in with daily epiphanies muddle the lines, and thus the acts themselves, wrong doings are never "concrete"
