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children of the dead
walk with me...
dead daughter and son
celebrate freedom...
the war we've won
dance and sing...
through the sky
make a doll...
make it fly
run on towards...
the trinity fields
see the silver...
the scythe i weild
watch it slice...
watch the blood pour
look in their eyes...
see they're no more
live forever...
be reborn
smile for me...
smile once more[/font]
dead daughter and son
celebrate freedom...
the war we've won
dance and sing...
through the sky
make a doll...
make it fly
run on towards...
the trinity fields
see the silver...
the scythe i weild
watch it slice...
watch the blood pour
look in their eyes...
see they're no more
live forever...
be reborn
smile for me...
smile once more[/font]
Published 14th Jul 2010
| Edited 26th Sep 2010
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MISS ELLIS!!!! THIS POEM... IT IS DIVINITY OF A HELLISH SORT! oh my goodness... fantastic...
14th Jul 2010 7:31pm
hahahah i know i know :D
bow down to your mistress :P
hahahahah glad you liked it ^w^
xx
bow down to your mistress :P
hahahahah glad you liked it ^w^
xx
15th Jul 2010 4:43am
15th Jul 2010 12:02pm
hahahah :P
*hug*
thanks for always taking the time to read and comment on my poems, i really really appreciate it!
^w^
x
*hug*
thanks for always taking the time to read and comment on my poems, i really really appreciate it!
^w^
x
28th Jul 2010 2:07am
the movement of this poem is amazing despite it being short. it was dark,eerie and fantastic! keep up the good work!
1st Aug 2010 3:15pm
5th Oct 2010 5:49pm
i 100% agree with unveiled_darkness!
it is sooooo gooooood >_<
dark, eeerie and it gives me goosebumps lol
the way you've drawn me as a reader in is brilliant and the rhyming is well done.
in this poem i see you have placed yourself in a fatherly situation and ending the crap life of your children to bring them into immortal life. (see i am ace at reading into poems or do i look into it too deeply)
stanza 6,7 and 8 make me gasp in horror :O
it's simply one of the best dark poems you have written. thumbs up to you!
keep writing hun
xx
it is sooooo gooooood >_<
dark, eeerie and it gives me goosebumps lol
the way you've drawn me as a reader in is brilliant and the rhyming is well done.
in this poem i see you have placed yourself in a fatherly situation and ending the crap life of your children to bring them into immortal life. (see i am ace at reading into poems or do i look into it too deeply)
stanza 6,7 and 8 make me gasp in horror :O
it's simply one of the best dark poems you have written. thumbs up to you!
keep writing hun
xx
5th Oct 2010 9:17pm
thank you again launa and thanks for spending your time reading and commenting x
