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Idle
Dust mites dance on her eyelashes and
spiders spin dreamscapes through her hair
and she idles
while buildings break like bones
around her
Forgotten
in the destruction
of other people's love
spiders spin dreamscapes through her hair
and she idles
while buildings break like bones
around her
Forgotten
in the destruction
of other people's love
Published 13th Jul 2010
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13th Jul 2010 3:11pm
love it. Short and perfect. Relate-able, yet able to retain a bit of mystery or provoke thought. Well done.
13th Jul 2010 4:20pm
I really love that idea of buildings breaking like bones...I can just picture that, it's such a good image.
26th Aug 2010 4:24pm
This poem is amazing! I love the imagery it creates, it's just magical. This is going to my reading list. :)
Anonymous
31st Jan 2011 1:21am
this poem had an amazing flow to it, and i love the opening lines!
31st Jan 2011 1:23am
Beautiful, easy read. You made love a city rather than an emotion. Clever, I like it.
Anonymous
9th Mar 2012 6:28pm
I like the image you created here. Broken like bones, just like our hearts when it breaks and no one cares.
