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Mabon
there are dead leaves
sprouting from her amber spine,
reaching with child-fingers
to devour the sun.
her skin is freezing,
seeping winter through
november pores.
seeking warmth,
the whiskey tongues
of godless boys
wish to decipher
the atlas of her thighs.
counting the sleepy fireflies
alight in her lungs- there is
wanderlust churning & warming
her frostbitten heartstrings.
swinging pendulum hips,
"I am the tease of autumn flames.
I breathe in mint sunsets,
& gasoline dreams."
sprouting from her amber spine,
reaching with child-fingers
to devour the sun.
her skin is freezing,
seeping winter through
november pores.
seeking warmth,
the whiskey tongues
of godless boys
wish to decipher
the atlas of her thighs.
counting the sleepy fireflies
alight in her lungs- there is
wanderlust churning & warming
her frostbitten heartstrings.
swinging pendulum hips,
"I am the tease of autumn flames.
I breathe in mint sunsets,
& gasoline dreams."
Published 28th Nov 2012
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28th Nov 2012 9:28pm
"seeking warmth,
the whiskey tongues
of godless boys
wish to decipher
the atlas of her thighs."
In keeping with your initial image, might I make a suggestion ? Exchanging "decipher" and "atlas" with something along the lines of bend, and branching.
Other than that ?
You have the making of a damn fine writer in my opinion. :)
the whiskey tongues
of godless boys
wish to decipher
the atlas of her thighs."
In keeping with your initial image, might I make a suggestion ? Exchanging "decipher" and "atlas" with something along the lines of bend, and branching.
Other than that ?
You have the making of a damn fine writer in my opinion. :)
29th Nov 2012 8:35pm
29th Nov 2012 1:28am
wow this is absolutely Wonderful,
how your wonders flow as you read the descriptive write, Think im in love lol
how your wonders flow as you read the descriptive write, Think im in love lol
29th Nov 2012 8:36pm
Half the time I don't really have a direction until my poems are finished. lol
29th Nov 2012 9:03am
Excellent! Your imagery in this is very good, and the verses well strung. Very impressive write indeed.
Uley
Uley
29th Nov 2012 8:37pm
Thank you so much.
I've been writing most of my life.
But I've just in the past year or so began to branch out. :)
I've been writing most of my life.
But I've just in the past year or so began to branch out. :)
