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adult@16
“Maturity buds late in our genes-
My father used to say,
He lagged and felt cheated in his life,
Some girls slapped in his face in their sixteen’s,
When he proposed one of them to be his wife-
He was twenty five then.
He was married late-
To a not so beautiful wife,
(And I even contradict my mom’s algorithm),
She always spewed trouble in the name of her fate,
And she even cursed my school girl’s logarithm-
Just because of her I could not had one sister even.
Then one happening night-
Mom watched me erecting my penis,
While I was watching a blue film,
My father had with her a fight,
He pulled me like a chicken to be slaughtered on my elbow tennis-
And he drove me to the highway brothel, “GREENS”.
“Fuck my son”, he shouted to the pimps-
“Fuck him to manhood!”
“Show all of your organs to him”,
“Bring that ugly desire in his dry limbs”,
“So that no girl can slap his sin-
Who says maturity buds late in our genes?”
(He went hysterical and died of a heart attack on the spot).
[b][i]Synopsis: adult@16
The opening lines very much emphasizes the mental allergy between the two prominent genders and an ignorant volatility clouding the whole script bringing it to a rare crude breed of naturalism of the protagonists.
Quite unusual in its theme, the piece is nearly a satire that sarcastically mocks at the absence of sex education throughout, even though does not attempt to preach the same. A father takes his sixteen year old son one night to a highway brothel to kick him to vomit his manhood in front of the world. The subject may sound vulgar, however, has been treated very differently without forcing any spices of art at all. There is no message, no dilution of the situation at all, and sounds to me a tragic-comedy, the first of my typical attempts in this class. Psychopathy, mental disturbance, inner wildness, sexual exasperation, heightens the emotional strings of a portion of the human culture that is mostly untouched.[/i][/b]
My father used to say,
He lagged and felt cheated in his life,
Some girls slapped in his face in their sixteen’s,
When he proposed one of them to be his wife-
He was twenty five then.
He was married late-
To a not so beautiful wife,
(And I even contradict my mom’s algorithm),
She always spewed trouble in the name of her fate,
And she even cursed my school girl’s logarithm-
Just because of her I could not had one sister even.
Then one happening night-
Mom watched me erecting my penis,
While I was watching a blue film,
My father had with her a fight,
He pulled me like a chicken to be slaughtered on my elbow tennis-
And he drove me to the highway brothel, “GREENS”.
“Fuck my son”, he shouted to the pimps-
“Fuck him to manhood!”
“Show all of your organs to him”,
“Bring that ugly desire in his dry limbs”,
“So that no girl can slap his sin-
Who says maturity buds late in our genes?”
(He went hysterical and died of a heart attack on the spot).
[b][i]Synopsis: adult@16
The opening lines very much emphasizes the mental allergy between the two prominent genders and an ignorant volatility clouding the whole script bringing it to a rare crude breed of naturalism of the protagonists.
Quite unusual in its theme, the piece is nearly a satire that sarcastically mocks at the absence of sex education throughout, even though does not attempt to preach the same. A father takes his sixteen year old son one night to a highway brothel to kick him to vomit his manhood in front of the world. The subject may sound vulgar, however, has been treated very differently without forcing any spices of art at all. There is no message, no dilution of the situation at all, and sounds to me a tragic-comedy, the first of my typical attempts in this class. Psychopathy, mental disturbance, inner wildness, sexual exasperation, heightens the emotional strings of a portion of the human culture that is mostly untouched.[/i][/b]
Published 18th Jun 2010
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Anonymous
26th Jun 2010 10:01pm
I remember reading this poem on my thread, and enjoying it then. The sheer savage intensity, the poetic vulgarity, it's all there. A dark, brutal, unrelentingly bleak and yet beautiful verse. And the final line in brackets was a fucking masterstroke.
28th Jun 2010 8:04am
Thank you so much Jack for all of your comments on this one...I was afraid while composing this because I have not written too many erotic poems and the subject was fromm one of your threads in which I have read some brilliant stuffs including yours...But then you have greatly influenced my writing ever since I joined this site and you commented upon my works...I have grown more matured and it's been a big hand of yours for the result...Thank you so much!!!
Anonymous
9th Jul 2010 2:27am
hm. interesting reading.
9th Jul 2010 9:46am
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11th Dec 2013 1:00am
at times I wonder
what draws one
to realms of poetry
Of that yet I'm unsure
You pop made an early adult of you
since then you would have grown
this poem is a privilege to read
a pleasure too
some day a poet
I too will be like you
what draws one
to realms of poetry
Of that yet I'm unsure
You pop made an early adult of you
since then you would have grown
this poem is a privilege to read
a pleasure too
some day a poet
I too will be like you
12th Dec 2013 5:52pm
Thanx a lot so much "again". This one is very close to my heart because of other reasons and I feel elated every time I hear a comment about it. Btw I cannot change my status as yet I am a virgin and not married:-)
17th Nov 2014 7:33pm
guys can never be virgins
as they all masturbate
==sex
only gals have to lose their hymens
men have no equivalent
u can' ask a doc
as they all masturbate
==sex
only gals have to lose their hymens
men have no equivalent
u can' ask a doc
18th May 2015 6:30am
