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are bloody beautiful, and i mean that in both ways. i totally get the image of almost a blob of creature undulating, "turning within itself" with a secret smile for its existence in the whole "We are stardust" idea. i probably can't explain it, as my eloquence has evaporated. all i mean is, that made the whole poem for me on first read because i hadn't got the hang of this strange birthing description... but on the third maybe, it became clear. complex and creative. you are rocking this skill set, Mr. A.

Overly kind, Jesta.

Was worried if it would work or not. Just because it registers on my train of thought, it'd lose most I think.
Great to see how you read. :)

Again, much thanks.

'..worried if it would work..'? surely you joke...

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   ~ a humdinger here, mrAlp ~

Eloquent enough, Mr sax.

Always a pleasure to read your words.

Pure philosophy. Certainly we should petition for that category, or dismissal of them all.
Or is it theological?.or where they meet. So many creation myths have this  dark sludge. The shark with glass imagery works quite well I think, can taste blood. First I thought gods vagina was a bit stark and unpoetic sounding, but actually seems to me quite clinical and blunt enough to work for what might boil down to the most base image. I agree the last four lines are great. Sounds like something a chaos magician might say while ejaculating onto a drawing of symbols...ha, quite enjoyed mr.a

Philosophy or abstract would be good. Personally I don't bother too much with worrying about the categories these days. Maybe one day I'll stick them all in erotic just to annoy the over-sized percentage that just come here to read that piss.

Well you got some unintended images, haha. Thanks for having a go, lb.

The last four lines are the best. They're pure poetry, betraying the soul of a dark artist. This poem read like it was about Noah, pondering God and life and everything as he travels inside the whale's stomach. Spiritual and chilling. Thanks for the read.

Bit worried the rest of the poem is outshon by the last lines, but I suppose those lines wouldn't appear that way if the rest of the poem was different.

Thanks for the kind words, Jack.

this brings indescribable imageries in picture perfect. I wonder your selection of words that brings the effect of this magnitude.. endless structures, no anatomy , n a gr8 last four liners!

thank you fr sharing this wonderful piece, Mr A.

Uma.

No. Thank you for reading, Uma.

Glad it wore on you a little.

i think that the weight of the first part and last four lines is nicely balanced by that gap between them. love the imagery and the line breaks, and, to be unoriginal, the last four lines are genius.

No, not the g word. I'm getting to old; you should claim it.

Thanks for overly kind comment, aglitch.

at a first reading i couldn't make out much of what was going on. somehow it all made sense on the inside. I love this poem for its originality in character and for its fluency in thought.
god.those.last.four.lines.bliss.

Well thank you, oph.

Yeah, bless those lines.