Pleasure me

very interesting poem it caught my attention and showed me something nicely done

thank you oni angel :D

thank you vivid :)

:D thank you Amancecio

A great start candy you rock

thanks you Magic poemz :D

Hi Candy:
We all have an animal side to our natures. You admit it, in what you say and how you say it. Congratulations! It's a good one.

I'd suggest, for continuity/consistency, your using "ride me like a bull". Animals with udders are ridden (usually) by bulls, not horses. :)

Just a suggestion. :) There's not much wrong with the poem as it stands.

Settembrini

thank you settembrini for your suggestion. I will leave for now, but will think on it. :)

Until this poem, I never would have guessed that something using "me" 11 times would make such a positive impression. For me the only minus is the use of the word "udders"---just seems out of place with the act of being ridden "like a horse".

Welcome to DU!

thank you JAZZ :) I didn't know there were 11 me's in there. Glad it's positively all about me :D like I said above, I will think on changing the udders and horse.

Great write sweets!!
Looking forward for more!!
Nice read!!!


Sir Lancelott