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I`m vulnerable
invincable
spontaneous
predictable
atonal
enharmonic
In Control
off the hook
Since I held
You
in my arms
Inconsolable
with closure
guarded
overexposed
unhinged
Stoic
speechless
full of music
Since I held
You
in my arms
I must confess
not able to express
emotion`s
full spectrum
in Our hearts
I wont try to impress
with gifts meaningless
"Our thing" uplifts
relationship
to art
I`m helpless
A Superman
I`m jealous
Your Number 1 Fan
Alone
across the Continent
Somehow
Completely Content
Since I held
You
in my arms
Published 28th Sep 2012
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28th Sep 2012 8:58am
This is well put together and I enjoy the
Superhuman metaphor, I liked the repeat of
Since I held
You
in my arms
Very effective
Great pace just like superman!
Best wishes
Ricecake
Superhuman metaphor, I liked the repeat of
Since I held
You
in my arms
Very effective
Great pace just like superman!
Best wishes
Ricecake
28th Sep 2012 1:28pm
Thank you --
this is supposed to be structured
like a "Great American Songbook" tune --
Old-Fashioned -- like "It Had To Be You".
"All The Things You Are" etc......
So I had Choruses that repeat.
this is supposed to be structured
like a "Great American Songbook" tune --
Old-Fashioned -- like "It Had To Be You".
"All The Things You Are" etc......
So I had Choruses that repeat.
28th Sep 2012 10:32am
Now if we could just learn how to eliminate the fight that comes before make up sex, we would have it made!!!! I'm on the trail of this logic...I can see it in the distance....Intellectualize it...keep talking...I'll follow your voice.
28th Sep 2012 1:29pm
aaaaah--
we are men --
if we follow each others voices we`ll end up in
circles just like the millenium of our ilk !
we are men --
if we follow each others voices we`ll end up in
circles just like the millenium of our ilk !
Anonymous
28th Sep 2012 11:09am
Unfortunately, fights come~they still suck drivel...
Strider
Strider
28th Sep 2012 1:30pm
Actually -- I thought Superman and Wonderwoman were fighting side-by-side --
I gotta find a better picture....
I gotta find a better picture....
