Erin

"my ravaged fighter
looking for love
whatnot

my intergalactic static
my prairie song
my girl from
spokane

sigh "

I loved the whole thing But this right here...the end, just made me smile ;)

milkyway

ah, smile. :]

that would do just fine. believe me.

some more please.

x

sumeet

Welcome back again, again. Guess good time to suggest that I think that last "again" is unnecessary,after falls asleep. The againness seems stable...anyway good to have tthe snippets back of such a boisterously romantic fella. Love that the million pearls and silken jungles always find a way in. your dirty isn't dirty, yet still good fun. The ending just a tadbit corny, but an awesome and sincere corny, and it feels awesome off the tongue... Again, a warm welcome

baron

my good brother.

this [and 12 more]was lying around as
a draft. might need some work. you are
right about that bugger. it was redundant.
might as well skim a bit more with time.

that kind of corny made me smile.:] it could
work. will see.

thanks again. x

sumeet  
 

My brother whom I have missed for some time.

When I read this the first time, I felt it was a mixmatch of emotion splattered accross a wonderous page.

And then *sigh just tied it up.
made it beautiful
gave it an
upper-class
write.

Again the romance that we have learnt to love, peeps through and that little touch of a special night is just beautiful.

I think if I were a man type man or a lady of quality I might propose.

Much love at you my very good friend.

Al-x-

Brot'er Al

warm welcome, my dear friend. this places has
missed you immensely. so honoured to have you
here, again. :]

i am glad 'sigh' worked. makes me happy. and damn, i would accept without a blink.:]

thank you for those wonderful words. feel
very relieved and welcome now.

blue skies, my good man

sumeet  

Whitewand6,

Thank you for makin Erin a folded over corner in the book of love/life. I have missed the guided tours you take us on through your universe.
Loved your dip into human failings with the line:
"what matters is
she comes around
again
 
and again"

Enjoyed!!!

tornado

tornado

old friend, so good to see you 'round these
parts. i hope you have been well, my man.:]

thank you for that warm feedback. always a
real pleasure to have you stop by and leave
those thoughts.

glad i can still make it work.

power,

sumeet

Sumeet

welcome back.
n a v.good comeback write.

how could you ever summate the whole poetry in this liner, " my ravaged fighter looking for love whatnot" ! amazing is one word.

shine on.

~uma.

uma

thank you as always.:]

that's quite something. and it actually
sums it all up to a great extent.

let's hope so.

best wishes,

sumeet

I think I have a crush on Erin.

I don't know how you do it, but one of the things i find so enticing about your poetry is that you can portray women so well. Sometimes I think deep down you must have some weird spot of woman in you because you just manage to make this perfect imperfect, feminine creation. Not something most male writers can achieve.

Another gushing: your ability to breathe life into your poems. I love love love this. Erin cries, but this doesn't mean she's sad. She eats, but that doesn't mean she's fat. You can have your characters in action without it meaning one certain thing. I love it.

Amazing, once again, your poems including women always get me.

sublime

rarely it so happens when i feel such a tug,
violent or otherwise, in my heart post learning
about the feedback/reaction of a reader.

this is one such. probably the best thing i have
heard in a very long time. i am immensely thankful
and touched. i will cherish this compliment for
sometime.:] without doubt.

and yes, i do have a weird spot. ha.

erin would be elated to know this, believe me.

i am elated now cos' i would be having you
stop 'round this corner time and again. a joy
of a reader.

power to you and your tribe.:]

lovelight,

sumeet

I think it works really well how the of the word 'whatnot' follows on from the phrase 'looking for love', cause that lighthearted little nonsense word cuts through the sentimentality of that love phrase, and in doing so makes it more heartfelt instead of cliched.
I also think the word 'whatnot' is just plain lovely. Along with the 'mishmash' and 'whatever' in the lines above it reminds me somehow of a contented old lady busily rattling through cutlery or pots and pans in a draw full of antique jumble.
There's something almost exotic about the phrase 'silken jungle'; I think it's the way each unit of sound dances in a different place when you speak it in your mouth and I like how that gives the girl this air of wonder.
'My girl from/spokane' was my favourite little bit, just cause by putting her in a place is like recognising the origin of her, and not just the present idea of her. And there's a real genuine tenderness to that.

merda

:] genuine joy to have you here.
have said it before and will do it again.
love your deconstruction.

the 'contended old lady' reference
just made me smile.

thank you.

happy writing, dear one

x

sumeet