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To Be Human
If there are hearts
we will all by ourselves
destroy one, if there is
eternity we will alone
make one unnatural, if
there is feeling we will
together obliterate it.
we will all by ourselves
destroy one, if there is
eternity we will alone
make one unnatural, if
there is feeling we will
together obliterate it.
Published 23rd Sep 2012
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23rd Sep 2012 3:26am
Put some backbone into it.
A little more effort...little-
All "If"s should start a new line
Cheers and well done marcella
A little more effort...little-
All "If"s should start a new line
Cheers and well done marcella
23rd Sep 2012 10:19pm
Faceless:
Thanks for the comments. I thought of starting each line with "if" but that looked rather repetitious. I want to be savage, and warm, or at least understanding, for I am one of "them," too. A conflicting heart, I guess. Thank you, again, for your marvelous suggestions.
Thanks for the comments. I thought of starting each line with "if" but that looked rather repetitious. I want to be savage, and warm, or at least understanding, for I am one of "them," too. A conflicting heart, I guess. Thank you, again, for your marvelous suggestions.
2nd Oct 2012 11:04pm
You really think it was marvelous!?
I feared my words would be percieved as heavy.... i guess i felt an absent weight...
I picked up a thought you dropped... that doesnt say much good about me, it does ?
Thanks for reasoning with me mercella. cheers!
I feared my words would be percieved as heavy.... i guess i felt an absent weight...
I picked up a thought you dropped... that doesnt say much good about me, it does ?
Thanks for reasoning with me mercella. cheers!
