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goodnight
It's a pleasure to remember
the long, hard wake nights
on the streets
in the dark corners of existence
where every atom of flesh and bone
becomes aware and burdened by nature -
when I'm lying here, warm
silent and cocooned
in the numbing clenched fist of night.
Guts stuffed senseless. Bones, skin,
worries about breakfast, all dead
then I snore.
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re: Re: goodnight
20th Sep 2012 8:11am
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20th Sep 2012 2:57am
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20th Sep 2012 8:15am
Re: goodnight
20th Sep 2012 3:15am
it's a gem of a poem Mr A. short but on closer inspection,revealing.
"when I'm lying here, warm
silent and cocooned
in the numbing clenched fist of night"
excellent stuff.
The whole poem runs fluid, seamless, effortless.
great job man.
"when I'm lying here, warm
silent and cocooned
in the numbing clenched fist of night"
excellent stuff.
The whole poem runs fluid, seamless, effortless.
great job man.
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re: Re: goodnight
20th Sep 2012 8:14am
Cheers, man.
Had 'the fist of night' in my head a while and was glad to find somewhere for it.
Thanks for your thoughts and praise.
Had 'the fist of night' in my head a while and was glad to find somewhere for it.
Thanks for your thoughts and praise.
Re: goodnight
20th Sep 2012 6:41pm
Very on-point. It is a shame that some might relate to this,though I suspect that first stanza may be being misread by some...well described. Homeless cold is a whole nother ballgame. People say "to the bone" fairly loosely,when you feel it so hard to shake. Think I will eat more,shower longer,and give the ol pillow just one extra fluff tonight
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re: Re: goodnight
20th Sep 2012 7:42pm
That was exactly the kind of core-cold and shivering ache I was aiming for so I'm glad you got that, but it's no surprise that you did.
Yeah indulge. You know what's behind and fuck knows what's coming so soak it all up.
Appreciate your presence, lb.
Yeah indulge. You know what's behind and fuck knows what's coming so soak it all up.
Appreciate your presence, lb.
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21st Sep 2012 6:36pm
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