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blue lagoon
I ask, for love. if true it be,
where lie you, so I can see.
Come so I can hold you above the fore
Of my sunken ship
So as with mist and dew we may kiss.
let clouds lay still in the azure of Octobers bliss
And fish be set in summers creel.
Come my dear, so we lay
With Sheets snaked at beds end
And whisper broken tears upon my ears.
while the wood chokes out the night in fray.
come my dear, lay with me and say love is what we feel.
where lie you, so I can see.
Come so I can hold you above the fore
Of my sunken ship
So as with mist and dew we may kiss.
let clouds lay still in the azure of Octobers bliss
And fish be set in summers creel.
Come my dear, so we lay
With Sheets snaked at beds end
And whisper broken tears upon my ears.
while the wood chokes out the night in fray.
come my dear, lay with me and say love is what we feel.
Published 5th Sep 2012
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6th Sep 2012 6:49am
Yea, this is a good one, what university did you attend, obvious you're inteligent, and educated , I picked up my gun and left my pen behind, it's not strange that I was introduced to it again, I may go to school, I'm procrastinating I know,but time will tell.
keep movin'
Sabbath
keep movin'
Sabbath
6th Sep 2012 7:27am
Actually I don't go to school lol.I Am malawian(africa). Dropped out of high school(financial reasons). Applied for university here but didn't get in. Right now am doing some accounting course at a community college. If you don't mind me asking, how was it there. You know how the media tends to tell a different story to what's really happening.
6th Sep 2012 8:12am
well I take it you mean how life is in the united states? well we're wasteful, we're predjudice,we're jealous, we're drug addicts of all kinds and in general we are non-sympathetic to the plights of others, we automatically assume that our religion is the only correct way to experience God[if there is one], we feel as though we can just stick our noses into another country' affairs, We have enough nuclear weapons to murder the world of man many times over, but we show our hypocrisy by telling another country not to produce them. there is however us outsiders who don't give a shit about politics or religion, we love and seek love, though we seldom find it ,plus big brother is everywhere. big brother is everywhere.
Sabbath
so let me ask you, whats it like over there?
Sabbath
so let me ask you, whats it like over there?
6th Sep 2012 8:21am
Not so bad. Way better than how the media portrays it. Nonetheless it can be very difficult. There is a very big diffenrence between the poor,well off and very rich, religion plays a vital role here, I just think because it gives the people a sense of hope. The economy now is pretty much crap, everyone seems to be striking. Some purely for the fun of it. We are however a very peaceful country as compared to other countries here and well abroad. People really don't like the states for that reason here, preach about love and peace but have been involved in more conflict than any other country in the past 50 years...and you tend to boss us around.
6th Sep 2012 5:08pm
Not bad at all. I love the romance depths you have in the poem. Truly romantic.
Clio
Clio
