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(in)sincere
(written for "lies" comp)
we lied together
in a bed of impulse
making love
on the promise of a super nova
exploding fractals
of magnetized attraction
galloping
then gliding
along the diminishing ley lines
of our tomorrow
innocently dishonest
we both said "I do"
having no idea
what forever meant
we lied together
in a bed of impulse
making love
on the promise of a super nova
exploding fractals
of magnetized attraction
galloping
then gliding
along the diminishing ley lines
of our tomorrow
innocently dishonest
we both said "I do"
having no idea
what forever meant
Published 23rd Aug 2012
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23rd Aug 2012 11:27pm
Something that happens all to often, we rush into marriage sometimes on a whim of passion and the initial infatuation, then when the newness fades reality sets in we realize we may have made a mistake. Good piece, good luck in the comp.
Red
Red
23rd Aug 2012 11:29pm
comps over my dear- but thank you kindly for reading and commenting, agree much on your view
Anonymous
24th Aug 2012 00:04am
I like it, lightbaron...good write.
Strider
Strider
24th Aug 2012 2:42pm
24th Aug 2012 1:38am
24th Aug 2012 2:43pm
loveeeeeeee that you love it. (ps. profile pic- the sexiest yet, you do something with your hair?)
25th Aug 2012 3:10am
Like the science mixed in the with the complicated rhythm of emotions which has a math and logic all its own...:) Philip Thanks for a good read.
28th Aug 2012 7:39pm
27th Aug 2012 2:19am
Itteration is a concept no mortal is equipped to even beging to try to fulful.Thankfully entropy will cause you stray andd dash the whole thing to pieces long before it ever gets tedious. That my friend is why life is interesting and even the simplest Itteration is endlessly gernerative. The true miracle of natural science!
28th Aug 2012 7:41pm
indeed.
and no negative feelings on the honesty of long term lies.
interesting trumps truth every time
and no negative feelings on the honesty of long term lies.
interesting trumps truth every time
21st Dec 2014 9:02pm
I think this is a very good poem, It captures the feelings of a impulse love. From wanting to feel comfort or simply trying to seek trill . I like this.
