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You are the bell of god.
In my womb.
deep rose leaf & thorns
I am lost I am lost
sick & sainted
stabbing christ in the dark.
no books
no lights
white pillows
and pills +
flowers and
needles
needles and air.
there is blood
in my dreams
blood and blue glass
blue glass and blood
there are dreams
in my blood
I am lost I am lost
In ghost and shade
star and fang
baby wind and blue halo
my spit taste
like roses & rust
Published 10th Jul 2012
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10th Jul 2012 4:03am
I like this. It took me a few reads to really immerse myself in the poem, but after that I find this interesting and something I'd like to analyze further.
I'm not sure whether you used the + and & symbols as part of the structure but replacing them with "and" would give the poem a little more depth, I think.
And the last two lines are very effective and chilling.
I wish you the best and welcome to the DU.
I'm not sure whether you used the + and & symbols as part of the structure but replacing them with "and" would give the poem a little more depth, I think.
And the last two lines are very effective and chilling.
I wish you the best and welcome to the DU.
