My pussy

you're brave opting for honest critique here, i think, miss G. i have to say, i couldn't really tell where we were supposed to stop and where to start again. if you broke it up into lines or put some punctuation in, it might help the reader see more than a string of pussy pussy pussy.

i like the confidence here, though. you obviously have a point you're making, i just think it could come across to us better if we could see it clearer.

"My pussy
my treasure
It always measures what the pleasure
My pussy
It don,t let some lame dude run cum and claim it
You feel this pussy between my legs
it has its own head with brains
it thinks spits and has the ability to sink large things
My pussy
chooses who she wants
maybe a freak or maybe a treat
a hug a kiss
MY clit skips tha beat"

apologies if you were just venting to the world. honest critiquers will try to help you develop your writing if you choose the 'honest critique' option.

best intentions, and welcome to DU. [:

Yes i agree thats exactly how i wrote it the case was im writing from my phone but thankyou for your suggestions its my first time trying this=)

oooh i see. the phones are always tough to format with, it seems. keep on, it gets better. [:

I dont give an f word of what jastelessa said,your poems is sexy and i love it,beleive every dude now wishes for that pussy,welcome to du baby

Thanku pah honestly just venting my thoughts at work got bored but gudlooking datswatsup

I agree Jaito. Great poem. Makes me want someone that can feel that way about themselves. Great writing and I love the flow of the whole thing. Cheers to Poetic License!

Damn this is hoy

Nice!