Soul of Sorrow

hello dearest Robert I think wisdom is when we can overcome our baser instincts... learning how to love and grow my baser instincts can be very dark if I feed this it gets worse... so I only encourage it sometimes for the most part choosing to be chaste of soul so I don't succumb I too want to live on...I think there are entites greater than us I know there are because I have encountered them and even they must be chaste of vision or there just wouldn't be anyone else how sad that would be... a very thought provoking write I read your other one too but it was too dark for me ❤️

Thank you so much. You are very kind. I appreciate the input as I’m a rookie and love reading and writing but I’m still learning. I look forward to reading your material and hope I can be half as gracious as you. Until next time….

“Oh what pity and despair I share with shadows of forgotten entities of desolation.”

That line is poetic gold. I’m going to go further. I call it poetic freedom. Acknowledging and embracing desolation doesn’t give it as much power. That’s how I look at it.  

Your poem touched me deeply. Welcome  to DUP.

Hello and thank you for your kindness. I appreciate your feedback as I’m still trying to find my way in writing. As far as desolation goes, I was imagining another realm or dimension where the entities actually came from. A lonely land of desolation. The astronauts who landed on the moon while walking around called it magnificent desolation. Maybe I need to correct the ending of this line. Any suggestions? I’m not asking for you to rewrite it for me. I’m simply saying should I change it? Thank you for your time.

No, I don’t. It’s perfect as is.