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False Flower
I was once a beautiful flower
Bursting with life
Petal were strong
Demanding all of you to keep me in your sight
Then one day, out of the blue
Another flower blooms
Right next to me, know who
I was in her shadow
I could not be seen
“Hey, I was here first.”
Why are you so mean?
Then a frost came
And she slowly started to go down
Why did it not affect me?
Why do I wear this frown?
She looked at me and with her last breath
Because we knew she was so close to death
“Do not be sad, you were always stronger than me
You were never a true flower but a weed”
Bursting with life
Petal were strong
Demanding all of you to keep me in your sight
Then one day, out of the blue
Another flower blooms
Right next to me, know who
I was in her shadow
I could not be seen
“Hey, I was here first.”
Why are you so mean?
Then a frost came
And she slowly started to go down
Why did it not affect me?
Why do I wear this frown?
She looked at me and with her last breath
Because we knew she was so close to death
“Do not be sad, you were always stronger than me
You were never a true flower but a weed”
Author's Note
random thought
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2nd Nov 2024 12:02pm
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2nd Nov 2024 9:22am
Dear F,
What a fabulous concept as a fable. For a “random thought” I enjoyed the storyline and fabulous imagery you created within. Terrific write. H🌷
What a fabulous concept as a fable. For a “random thought” I enjoyed the storyline and fabulous imagery you created within. Terrific write. H🌷
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3rd Nov 2024 8:56pm
It's really written well, also quite a story with complex interactions and a lot of hidden meanings and subtleties - just my opinion.
Great.
Great.
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